Developing thesis and supporting claims
Chaya Leverton on Nov 13th 2012
- Thesis: As technology develops, we become more dependent on each other and less self-sufficient, which ultimately benefits us by fostering a society of cooperation and collaboration.
- Claim: Our brains are changing to adapt to technology. Once we get used to technology, it changes us. Once our society adapts to technological change, it is not easy to just go back to the old ways. We get used to technology, hence we get used to our new inter-dependent lifestyle. If we get used to telling time from clocks, for example, that it how our brains will start to measure and anticipate time, and consequently we will have to rely on and collaborate with others to produce these new time-telling devices. (Backed by Carr)
- Claim: The world is being recreated. We are leaving our older methods behind in exchange for new technologies. These new technologies are connecting us and reshaping our society and culture. As we come to depend on these technologies, we also come to depend on those who help us produce them. Our society- and even our world- is becoming a “global village” where everyone is connected and everyone contributes to a greater goal. (Backed by McLuhan)
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I like that you are so sure of your thesis. Im not sure how, but you can really commit to a plan! I wish I was as consistent and confident in my ideas 🙂
The claims you make are powerful, strong, and clear. I think you might still need a clear motive, though.
Why should I want to read your paper? What are you telling me that I absolutely NEED to know?
My motive…I’m showing you that there is a good side to advanced technology. Many people cite the negatives effects of technology on our society, particularly that it makes us lazier, more dependent, and less motivated. I’m going to try to prove that while technology does make us more dependent on one another, it is not necessarily a bad thing. In fact, the more dependent we are on each other, the more collaborative we become. Our society becomes an interconnected global village that is conducive to even more advancements.
^Well clearly you do have motive and you do have strong feelings about the subject. I think it’s a matter of being able to use provocative diction – maybe in the thesis? – to convey that. Or you can shape the introduction using your motive and then present your thesis afterwards. Also, I can’t wait to read about what you have to say about global villages!
You’re very decisive about your thesis and supporting claims. I wish that I had the same kind of luck. I agree with Damla that you should use the motive as the introduction and then present the thesis. Can’t wait to read what you write!