Part III
What I think about what I learned (or didn’t learn): Reflect on what you learned, what it was like to do this research, where you had difficulties, and anything else you’d like me to know about how this project went for you.
What I learned during this research is that not all the information can fit into one paper. Therefore, it is better to focus on some points, rather than all the points and make it confusing. I think this project was hard when it came to organizing the information into different paragraphs and parting the information. One problem with writing this paper was probably repeating some words and topics or overly restating something because it is a long essay and sometimes you get carried away and forget what you wrote. It is good to emphasize the topics, but it is not good to keep repeating the same information over and over again. Another problem that I encountered while writing this essay was probably concluding each paragraph and connecting it back to the main topic. What I tried doing was listing out all the misconceptions and ideas that people may have about investment and pointing out the positives and tips to avoid losing a huge amount of money. I think I did well in terms of putting as much information as possible into short paragraphs, hopefully making it easier for the readers to read and understand the topic. I also included some personal experiences and some mistakes that other people make, so my readers won’t make the same mistake when they first start to invest. I think the research paper was fun to write and helped me understand a lot about investing myself. I had a huge writer’s block in the middle preventing me to start my essay. I think going forward I might have to look back at my essay and add more information and remove some repetitive statements to make the research paper a little more informative.
[MM1]Careful here using “always” — this is not everyone’s story, so you’d be wise not to generalize. “Often they share” or “many people I’ve spoken to” etc. etc.
[MM2]Here, you’d still want to cite the source. Merriam Webster?
[MM3]This might be a good place to briefly mention investments in index funds, stocks, real estate, bonds, art, etc.
Since you are specifically talking about ways to grow money via non-tangible goods, you might explain that here.
[MM4]I don’t think this is substantiated. Perhaps, you have the greatest risk of losing money.
[MM5]Hahah! Excellent advice!!
[MM6]Excellent job introducing all of your sources in this paper.
[MM7]But wait, isn’t that what your job is in this paper?! 🙂
[MM8]I am confused about the source here — is it Chris Davis or is it Pappis?
[MM9]From the Works Cited, I see that this is actually Davis quoting Pappis. This comes across as awkward. Instead, you can say “Chris Davis (introduce him) quotes certified financial Michael Pappis who says, “fractional shares can..” “
[MM10]You’ll want to explain to your reader what index funds are.
[MM11]I think you’re burying your thesis here! This would be an excellent starting place for the whole paper.
The guiding question might be: How do young, broke college students who haven’t yet started a career begin to invest?
[MM12]Yes.
[MM13]Again, careful here with generalizations: “some people”
[MM14]Davis, Chris.
[MM15]Saad, Lydia and Jeffrey M. Jones.
[MM16]Also, I didn’t see this source in the paper?
[MM17]Excellent job! Thank you for all of your time and hard work!