In my essay, my focus is to describe the reforms that are necessary in the criminal justice system to prevent the number of wrongful imprisonments. I gave the details about cases where injustice occurred but didn’t really expand on what needed to be done. One of my peers pointed this out and said that I needed to include more analysis of the points that I mentioned (the different ways of reform) and connect it back to my thesis statement. With this type of topic, it is difficult to include a lot of analysis as it is pretty fact based. But I think there are ways I can go about including some. In addition, there are plenty of grammatical errors that need correcting.
I also want to emphasis the consequences of what wrongful imprisonment did to these men’s life. I really want to include pathos to evoke some emotions like sympathy from my audience. I would like them to feel enraged as well so that they can recognize that reforms need to be implemented. I have yet to make those changes in my writing. For now, I focused my revisions on what my peers said needed fixing.
Each part of the RefAnnBib was useful. It saved me a lot of time when I was writing the essay. As usual, the peer review groups are super helpful. I take a lot of their feedback into consideration when I am revising. I value their perspective and insight because they can look at my essay and see the major flaws and point them out. There might have been certain things that I overlooked that I thought was clear but wasn’t. Again, I never look forward to revising my piece. Knowing that it will never be perfect or sound exactly the way I want it to be no encouragement. But the feedback I have received from my peers and the organization I provided for myself in form of the RefAnnBib helped me in this process. Those two things make the revision process less tedious.