I think I have used Hong’s writing as a model in my first draft. I liked how she started the essay with a very descriptive paragraph and set the tone of the overall essay well. She also made craft moves like imagery, sensory details, and dialogue in this paragraph. I have also used these craft moves in my writing when describing a specific scene that directly relates to my moment of epiphany. This essay also helped me with the conclusion part as I was struggling with how to wrap up my writing. My epiphany came in the form of a question, which I still can’t find an answer to. Her writing gave me a hint that throwing some questions can be one form of a conclusion paragraph.
