Dear Readers,
Thank you for reading my essay.
My goal was to create suspense, share a truthfully story from my past and how has it has shaped my perspective towards life.
I surely would benefit from: “Unity of tense” (Zinsser p50)
Although I believe the essay flowed nicely. It would have been delightful, if I allowed you to time travel through my story in an effortless manner, by employing the “Unity of tense.”
I also should have shared a better understanding of the dynamics of my uncle’s life and personality.
I should have provided you with an example of how this event has changed my life.
Furthermore, I could have explored the African American connection that my family shares with President Obama.
Thanks,
Jay
