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Dear Reader,

I tried to write this lyric essay using style techniques, including paragraphing, sectioning, dialogue, scene and correct grammar, effectively.

It was difficult putting this essay together, as pieces and paragraphs originally handwritten in an even rougher draft were out of order or overwritten.

No particular sentence stands out in the essay.

I do hope the essay and style techniques used created an effective essay.

Essay Three

Joanne and Eric were parting ways.

For both, it was a decision for more comfort as individuals, before they could work together as a team or couple.

Perhaps a return to previous occupations.
Perhaps development in new and different directions.

It remained to be seen.

“Well, I guess this is it.”

“Yeah, I guess so… well, why don’t we separate, but plan a meeting in six months…”

“Well, I guess that would be OK…, maybe even four months.”

“OK”.

Was reinvention possible?

For some, the answer was no.
For others…, why not? If walking and breathing, then at any age.

Joanne, with a new found interest in the foods of various cultures considered attending a cooking course. After checking cooking schools, even a chef’s certificate she decided taste and food preparation were really not her thing.

She had heard something about an interior design certificate at NYU. She always did have an interest in interior design, always remodeling areas of her apartment, even those areas already remodeled before.

She decided to check it out.

Eric, if not out walking for exercise, was usually on the computer. He had dealt with the couple’s business previously.

No reason to be on the computer now… the business was over… or was there?

Perhaps a computer class.
Perhaps computer programming.

He could google computer schools and classes on the internet. An older citizen, although looking good for his age, he heard that some major colleges had very reduced rates for older citizens.

Long ago, he had heard Columbia had a Master’s degree program in computer programming. Did they still have it? and very reduced rates for older citizens? or other major colleges?

Perhaps he would google it and find out.

Although apart; both do take courses. Joanne does take an course in NYU’s Interior Design Certificate program. She hates to admit it, but she does like it oddly enough, and it does keep her busy and absorbed, and does lead to even another.

Eric likewise finds the MA program at Columbia still does exist and there are reduced rates for older citizens (one of the advantages of being an older citizen), and with no intention whatsoever of getting a Master’s, does enroll in a computer course followed by a programming course.

Both enjoy courses immensely, but when they get home; well, walls aren’t much company; definitely not high on the list for company.

And one had to admit, each did miss the other.

But why, each wondered… they were not alike, they had nothing in common…

Was it a history, of sorts…?

Who knew?

The fact remained. Each was secretly glad they had planned a meeting in four months.

In fact, there must have been some reason they were married in the first place…
Each had no idea why, but some reason.

And, if they really weren’t alike, well, perhaps they could be complementary; one’s strong points’, the other’s weak points. Business, a perfect example; one could manage business affairs; one could worki at business projects.

Structure and connections though different, inputs and outputs were the same, but in varying proportions.

With the huge number of obstacles, divergent crossing paths, and very necessary, difficult work entailed, was it worth it?

Both decided yes; workable; no other choice; and definitely stronger together, than apart.

Four months later, they met at the Stars Diner, an upscale diner-restaurant with square, rectangular wood tables. Tables were set with white placemats and napkins, salt and pepper shakers, and ketchup as well.
To booths or chairs, on black and white checkered marble and wood floors, waiters and waitresses bustled about pouring coffee and tea; she, ordering a salad, he, a burger on whole wheat, with lettuce, tomato and fries.

Conversation was simple and sparse.

They bid each other hello, asked the other how they were, discussed the weather and such. They talked about their son, grown, doing well, his family, wife, and their grandchildren. They mentioned the classes they were enrolled in, playing them down, although both quite taken with them.

Finally deciding to live together for a trial period of three to four months…
And see how things went…

To be continued, if…
To end, on the other hand, if…

Walking about on tiptoe, things went well the first few weeks and did continue…
Conversation was sparse at first, and did become quite animated; both busy with their classes, families, friends, and household.

In the future, things would continue…, but who knew?

It remained to be seen, but both were optimistic.

Dear Reader,

I tried to write this lyric essay using style techniques, including paragraphing, sectioning, dialogue, scene and correct grammar, effectively.

It was difficult putting this essay together, as pieces and paragraphs originally handwritten in an even rougher draft were out of order or overwritten.

No particular sentence stands out in the essay.

I do hope the essay and style techniques used created an effective essay.

Essay Three

Joanne and Eric were parting ways.

For both, it was a decision for more comfort as individuals, before they could work together as a team or couple.

Perhaps a return to previous occupations.
Perhaps development in new and different directions.

It remained to be seen.

“Well, I guess this is it.”

“Yeah, I guess so… well, why don’t we separate, but plan a meeting in six months…”

“Well, I guess that would be OK…, maybe even four months.”

“OK”.

Was reinvention possible?

For some, the answer was no.
For others…, why not? If walking and breathing, then at any age.

Joanne, with a new found interest in the foods of various cultures considered attending a cooking course. After checking cooking schools, even a chef’s certificate she decided taste and food preparation were really not her thing.

She had heard something about an interior design certificate at NYU. She always did have an interest in interior design, always remodeling areas of her apartment, even those areas already remodeled before.

She decided to check it out.

Eric, if not out walking for exercise, was usually on the computer. He had dealt with the couple’s business previously.

No reason to be on the computer now… the business was over… or was there?

Perhaps a computer class.
Perhaps computer programming.

He could google computer schools and classes on the internet. An older citizen, although looking good for his age, he heard that some major colleges had very reduced rates for older citizens.

Long ago, he had heard Columbia had a Master’s degree program in computer programming. Did they still have it? and very reduced rates for older citizens? or other major colleges?

Perhaps he would google it and find out.

Although apart; both do take courses. Joanne does take an course in NYU’s Interior Design Certificate program. She hates to admit it, but she does like it oddly enough, and it does keep her busy and absorbed, and does lead to even another.

Eric likewise finds the MA program at Columbia still does exist and there are reduced rates for older citizens (one of the advantages of being an older citizen), and with no intention whatsoever of getting a Master’s, does enroll in a computer course followed by a programming course.

Both enjoy courses immensely, but when they get home; well, walls aren’t much company; definitely not high on the list for company.

And one had to admit, each did miss the other.

But why, each wondered… they were not alike, they had nothing in common…

Was it a history, of sorts…?

Who knew?

The fact remained. Each was secretly glad they had planned a meeting in four months.

In fact, there must have been some reason they were married in the first place…
Each had no idea why, but some reason.

And, if they really weren’t alike, well, perhaps they could be complementary; one’s strong points’, the other’s weak points. Business, a perfect example; one could manage business affairs; one could worki at business projects.

Structure and connections though different, inputs and outputs were the same, but in varying proportions.

With the huge number of obstacles, divergent crossing paths, and very necessary, difficult work entailed, was it worth it?

Both decided yes; workable; no other choice; and definitely stronger together, than apart.

Four months later, they met at the Stars Diner, an upscale diner-restaurant with square, rectangular wood tables. Tables were set with white placemats and napkins, salt and pepper shakers, and ketchup as well.
To booths or chairs, on black and white checkered marble and wood floors, waiters and waitresses bustled about pouring coffee and tea; she, ordering a salad, he, a burger on whole wheat, with lettuce, tomato and fries.

Conversation was simple and sparse.

They bid each other hello, asked the other how they were, discussed the weather and such. They talked about their son, grown, doing well, his family, wife, and their grandchildren. They mentioned the classes they were enrolled in, playing them down, although both quite taken with them.

Finally deciding to live together for a trial period of three to four months…
And see how things went…

To be continued, if…
To end, on the other hand, if…

Walking about on tiptoe, things went well the first few weeks and did continue…
Conversation was sparse at first, and did become quite animated; both busy with their classes, families, friends, and household.

In the future, things would continue…, but who knew?

It remained to be seen, but both were optimistic.

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Dear Reader,

I tried to write this lyric essay using style techniques, including paragraphing, sectioning, dialogue, scene and correct grammar, effectively.

It was difficult putting this essay together, as pieces and paragraphs originally handwritten in an even rougher draft were out of order or overwritten.

No particular sentence stands out in the essay.

I do hope the essay and style techniques used created an effective essay.

Essay Three

Joanne and Eric were parting ways.

For both, it was a decision for more comfort as individuals, before they could work together as a team or couple.

Perhaps a return to previous occupations.
Perhaps development in new and different directions.

It remained to be seen.

“Well, I guess this is it.”

“Yeah, I guess so… well, why don’t we separate, but plan a meeting in six months…”

“Well, I guess that would be OK…, maybe even four months.”

“OK”.

Was reinvention possible?

For some, the answer was no.
For others…, why not? If walking and breathing, then at any age.

Joanne, with a new found interest in the foods of various cultures considered attending a cooking course. After checking cooking schools, even a chef’s certificate she decided taste and food preparation were really not her thing.

She had heard something about an interior design certificate at NYU. She always did have an interest in interior design, always remodeling areas of her apartment, even those areas already remodeled before.

She decided to check it out.

Eric, if not out walking for exercise, was usually on the computer. He had dealt with the couple’s business previously.

No reason to be on the computer now… the business was over… or was there?

Perhaps a computer class.
Perhaps computer programming.

He could google computer schools and classes on the internet. An older citizen, although looking good for his age, he heard that some major colleges had very reduced rates for older citizens.

Long ago, he had heard Columbia had a Master’s degree program in computer programming. Did they still have it? and very reduced rates for older citizens? or other major colleges?

Perhaps he would google it and find out.

Although apart; both do take courses. Joanne does take an course in NYU’s Interior Design Certificate program. She hates to admit it, but she does like it oddly enough, and it does keep her busy and absorbed, and does lead to even another.

Eric likewise finds the MA program at Columbia still does exist and there are reduced rates for older citizens (one of the advantages of being an older citizen), and with no intention whatsoever of getting a Master’s, does enroll in a computer course followed by a programming course.

Both enjoy courses immensely, but when they get home; well, walls aren’t much company; definitely not high on the list for company.

And one had to admit, each did miss the other.

But why, each wondered… they were not alike, they had nothing in common…

Was it a history, of sorts…?

Who knew?

The fact remained. Each was secretly glad they had planned a meeting in four months.

In fact, there must have been some reason they were married in the first place…
Each had no idea why, but some reason.

And, if they really weren’t alike, well, perhaps they could be complementary; one’s strong points’, the other’s weak points. Business, a perfect example; one could manage business affairs; one could worki at business projects.

Structure and connections though different, inputs and outputs were the same, but in varying proportions.

With the huge number of obstacles, divergent crossing paths, and very necessary, difficult work entailed, was it worth it?

Both decided yes; workable; no other choice; and definitely stronger together, than apart.

Four months later, they met at the Stars Diner, an upscale diner-restaurant with square, rectangular wood tables. Tables were set with white placemats and napkins, salt and pepper shakers, and ketchup as well.
To booths or chairs, on black and white checkered marble and wood floors, waiters and waitresses bustled about pouring coffee and tea; she, ordering a salad, he, a burger on whole wheat, with lettuce, tomato and fries.

Conversation was simple and sparse.

They bid each other hello, asked the other how they were, discussed the weather and such. They talked about their son, grown, doing well, his family, wife, and their grandchildren. They mentioned the classes they were enrolled in, playing them down, although both quite taken with them.

Finally deciding to live together for a trial period of three to four months…
And see how things went…

To be continued, if…
To end, on the other hand, if…

Walking about on tiptoe, things went well the first few weeks and did continue…
Conversation was sparse at first, and did become quite animated; both busy with their classes, families, friends, and household.

In the future, things would continue…, but who knew?

It remained to be seen, but both were optimistic.

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Dear Reader,

In my Essay 2 Draft, I focused on the organization of paragraphs and sections to 
create unity.

I also focused on the development, characteristics, and attributes of a character.

I also chose to develop Essay 1 in a new direction.

A concern would be possibly that perhaps I did not create unity; I was planning to write thoughts concerning possible causes for specific actions; but did decide that, that was another topic; perhaps essay.

Also possibly there exists an inappropriate change of tense.

In any case, I do hope the following essay maintains the reader’s interest.

Essay 2 Draft

In every newspaper, every magazine, every printed piece, Clinton could read 
“Admits to Affair”.

It was the topic of conversation at work, places of employment; jobs everywhere.

A transgression around since the beginning of time, it may not have been exemplary, it is true, but was it not a personal affair? Only those closest to him had a right to anger and/or upset.

And what about the issues? Issues of government, the economy, ie: the nation? The improvement of issues he was voted into office for? Whether or not proposals for various reforms were being followed through with?

Proposals and reforms for universal healthcare and coverage; proposals of domestic programs for education, worker training and child care subsidies. Reforms for gun control, as well as a ban on assault weapons. Proposals to cut the deficit, and allow for the correct balance between deficit spending and investments, in such domestic programs.

And what about issues of foreign policy? Actions in Somalia, Bosnia, and Haiti? or NAFTA, the North American Free Trade Agreement, finally concluded and signed in 1994? or the Kremlin Accords, an agreement signed and concluded with Russian president, Boris Yeltsin, to disallow nuclear arms towards one another’s country?

Was there any concern by the media over whether these reforms were under development towards the economy’s; ie: the nation’s, future prosperity?

Well… it remained to be seen….

But nothing was over yet… and so he would continue working on the issues… for the reasons he was voted into office for…. improving the economy and therefore nation.

At the end of his term, he established The Clinton Foundation, working and acting towards improving the world.

Hope does spring eternal.

NAFTA

Dear Reader,

In 1994, I signed a lease to an apartment.The same year several national and international agreements were signed. One of these agreements was chosen to discuss in the following essay. Correlating this agreement to the much smaller scale of signing a lease was difficult. However, learning more about this agreement caught my interest.
I received several comments of advice to improve my initial draft to write the following essay revision.

One comment stated, that although my descriptions were appreciated, certain sentences needed further clarity.

Another comment indicated that my essay could use a title.
Two comments believed that choosing one event over several for comparison would be more effective.

Last, a comment suggested the “motif” ( a great word to apply to writing) of old and new could be worked more creatively within the essay.
I received very effective comments with which to work to improve my essay.

I liked most about this essay that it concerned an international agreement, and gave me the opportunity to learn more about it. I believe the revision is a decent draft, but like most drafts, could always use some improvements. Perhaps better choice of words, sentence, structure, rhythm, and/or pattern.

Revision

In 1994, I signed a lease to one of several favorite apartments available for rent. It was a great little apartment, sunny and bright with wood floors and moldings, as well as high ceilings and whitewashed walls. It was an older building, the type no longer built today. Although an older building, both building and apartment appeared fresh and new to me. The high ceilings, moldings, and chandelier were special, interesting and had a beauty of their own.

Located in NYC; a major metropolitan city, my apartment had easy access to all; transportation, such as buses and trains; stores, supermarkets, work, etc. The apartment, fresh and new, although in reality an older building, had easy access to all.

On a much, much smaller scale, it could be correlated to the international agreement, NAFTA, signed the same year.
In January, 1994, NAFTA, the North American Free Trade Agreement, was signed. This was an agreement and/or contract between Canada, Mexico, and the US, creating a trade bloc between nations. This trade bloc allowed for open trade and equality between countries, and the elimination of tariffs, on particular items. Items such as eggs, corn, and meat were tariff-free. With open trade and easier access to goods, such goods would be available to all. Basic foods such as these should be automatically tariff-free, allow them to be affordable and available.

The purpose of NAFTA was to expand trade between the US, Canada, and Mexico. Expanding trade would allow countries to become more competitive as well as strengthen and build businessess. As businesses grew in size and strength, economies; in other words, nations; would also increase in size, strength, and resources.

Trade tripled, and US exports grew by 156%. Gas and food prices were reduced, due to the removal of tariffs. Services such as banking and healthcare quadrupled. However, in spite of this success, there were several costs and setbacks. With manufacturers moving to Mexico to take advantage of reduced labor costs and wages, US jobs were destroyed, and wages were lower in certain areas. Mexican farmers were exploited, and the environment polluted, due to the lower cost of corn and grains. Mexican farmers were forced to farm marginal land and use more fertilizer, causing pollution and deforestation.

Despite these setbacks, NAFTA, was the largest trade agreement in the world and largely successful. All three countries could maintain their independence, yet work together.

A novel agreement in 1994, NAFTA, based on an earlier set of laws, were necessary reforms needed by all three countries for some time previously, allowing for, and the hope of, a brighter future everywhere.
My apartment also, on a much, much smaller scale was the hope of a bright future; many twists and turns perhaps, but bright and forward always.
NAFTA would hopefully continue in its entirety, and allow for a brighter future across the globe.

Dear Reader —

In 1994, I signed a lease to one of several favorite apartments. The same year various national and international agreements were signed. Many more occurred than I have mentioned in the following essay. Correlating such agreements to the much smaller scale of signing a lease, was difficult. However, learning of such agreements was of interest.

One piece of Zinsser advice of interest, discussed in class as well, included that words, are the “tools” of a writer. They should be “used with originality and care…Good writers of prose must be part poet… ” (page 36).
Also, “…develop a respect for words …. And about their shades of meaning…”. (page 32).

Rhythm, pattern, sound, uniqueness, length of sentence, etc. should be considered. Sentences should move along at various “gaits”. The order of a sentence can be reversed, the sentence length altered, a unique word substituted, and/or a phrase added, with emotional weight.
I believe I can pay more attention to rhythm, pattern, sentence length, uniqueness of words, etc.; perhaps, all of the above, to achieve better writing.

Essay Draft 1

In 1994, I signed a lease moving into a favorite apartment. It was a great little apartment, sunny and bright, with wood floors and moldings, as well as high ceilings and whitewashed walls. It was an older building; the type no longer built today. Although an older building; both building and apartment appeared fresh and new to me. The high ceilings, moldings and chandelier were special, interesting, and had a beauty of their own.

Located in NYC; a major metropolitan city, my apartment had easy access to all; transportation, such as buses and trains; stores, supermarkets, work, etc. The apartment, fresh and new, although in reality an older building, had easy access to all.

On a much, much smaller scale, it was similar to various national and international agreements and/or contracts signed the same year. Some of those agreements and/or contracts included: nationally, former president Clinton’s State of the Union Address; internationally, NAFTA, as well as the Kremlin Accords. Also given the same year were several Nobel Peace Prizes.

January 25, 1994, Bill Clinton delivered his State of the Union Address calling for health care reform, the ban on assault weapons and welfare reform. Necessary reforms, these reforms were needed by many, and at the very least, to reduce the budget; maintaining the economy, and in effect, the nation; with its prosperous businesses and population.

Fresh and new, but based on an earlier set of laws, these necessary reforms were needed by the economy for some time previously, allowing for, and the hope of, a brighter future in the US.

On an international level, in January, 1994, NAFTA, the North American Free Trade Agreement, was signed. This was an agreement and/or contract between Canada, Mexico and the US, creating a trade bloc between nations. This trade bloc allowed for open trade and equality between countries, and the elimination of tariffs, on particular items. Items such as eggs, corn and meat became tariff-free. With open trade and easier access to goods, such would be amenable to all. All three countries could maintain their independence, yet work together.

January 14, 1994, former president Bill Clinton and Russian president Boris Yeltsin signed the Kremlin Accords, stopping nuclear missiles towards each country’s targets. The Kremlin Accords also provided for dismantling of the nuclear arsenal in the Ukraine. Such actions would hopefully continue in their entirety and allow for a brighter future.

October 1994, Nobel Prizes were given for Physics, Chemistry, Medicine, Literature, Peace and Economics signifying major advancements in these areas. Some of the recipients were Yasser Arafat, Shimon Peres, and Yitzhak Rabin.

My apartment also on a much, much smaller scale was the hope of a bright future; many twists and turns perhaps but bright and forward always.

All agreements and/or contracts and actions were based on previous older systems, situations and laws, and allowed for major advancements and improvements. All would hopefully continue in their entirety, and allow for a brighter future across the globe.

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One piece of Zinsser advice of interest, discussed in class as well, included that words, are the “tools” of a writer. They should be “used with originality and care…Good writers of prose must be part poet… ” (page 36).
Also, “…develop a respect for words …. And about their shades of meaning…”. (page 32).

Rhythm, pattern, sound, uniqueness, length of sentence, etc. should be considered. Sentences should move along at various “gaits”. The order of a sentence can be reversed, the sentence length altered, a unique word substituted, and/or a phrase added, with emotional weight.
I believe I can pay more attention to rhythm, pattern, sentence length, uniqueness of words, etc.; perhaps, all of the above, to achieve better writing.

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