Cool Paragraph
Us shoppers I believe are viewed as the prey and the sales people are the predators; their jobs are to lure us to whatever it is that they are selling and then to catch us by the hook or in this case our wallets. They use every trick and tactics that they have been trained to learn and use them very well on us, just look at the axe commercial that says if you spray yourself with axe females will flock you. We are being preyed upon and we don’t even notice it but that is New York for you, It will never change just look at how people got preyed upon by pocket pickers back in the 30’s the only thing that changed is that the pocket pickers have become the department stores. I then make my way up the escalator to the next floor and hunt (browse) for something I might like. But going into these stores really does make me feel like we are animals. I remember the last time I went to the polo store inside and I was looking for a specific sweater and I asked an employee if they had a medium and I noticed that another person seemed to be looking for the same size in the same sweater as me, the employee tells me there might be one or two left and where to check and suddenly I see this other person walking twenty miles per hour towards the area and we are both searching and he’s looking at me and I’m looking at him.
March 30th, 2009 at 1:40 pm
i like the comparison you made between human beings and animals. I also admire the fact that you added your own personal experience to the essay.
March 31st, 2009 at 12:20 pm
It’s funny how much we resemble animals when we are shopping. You provide a great extended metaphor throughout this paragraph. I was a bit confused when you mentioned the pickpockets in the 30’s, but it was later clarified when you compared them to department stores. The use of metaphors is great.
March 31st, 2009 at 7:03 pm
I really like this paragraph. its cool indeed. I love the way you compared shopping and sales people to hunting and preys . When I read this, the thought a forest came to my mind and i can imagine the animals hunting for food. And i especially like the last part of the when there was one sweater left and you and the other person both looked at each other, I can imagine the expression on your faces. Very interesting to read. good job..