Assignment 18

From the large packet I handed out last week, read p. 132-139. One is an essay on “Clutter” and another is on “Grammar.” After you read, choose 5 sentences from your paper and edit out the “Clutter” and clear up the grammar. In your reply to this post, post two paragraphs: both the original 5 sentences and the decluttered, re-grammarized versions. : )

You should also begin revising your papers this week.

**Remember we’re in the computer lab in the other building on Thursday.**

4 thoughts on “Assignment 18”

  1. The NCAA have also signed a $7.3 billion contract with ESPN which will end in 2026 (Nocera et al). Clearly, there shouldn’t be an issue in paying the athletes as their respective programs can afford to do so. This illustrates how these athletes are being exploited because the NCAA and college programs are not paying these athletes even when they have the ability to do so and instead are using them for their own self-interest. More instances which show the wealth of the NCAA are mentioned in “Nine Points to Consider Regarding the Payment of College Athletes” in which it is stated that the NCAA basketball Tournament, excluding the season, makes $750 million dollars (Katz, Ron et al). Ron Katz describes the idea that essentially the NCAA is a business, not a program which helps its students, and its a corrupt business exploiting their workers

    The NCAA have also signed a $7.3 billion contract with ESPN which ends in 2026 (Nocera et al). There shouldn’t be an issue in paying the athletes because their programs can afford to do so. This shows how these athletes are being exploited because the NCAA are not paying them even when they have the ability to do so and are using them for their own benefit. More examples which show the wealth of the NCAA are mentioned in “Nine Points to Consider Regarding the Payment of College Athletes” which states that the NCAA basketball Tournament makes $750 million dollars (Katz, Ron et al). Katz displays the idea that the NCAA is a corrupt business, taking in all the money that their players generate.

  2. What is defined as a crisis is interpersonal to each person, and is based off of what you are going through, and what you are able to do to solve your problems with what you have.
    …. ,found was that due to the excessive costs of college, that the financial burden put onto students does negatively affect students in the future, whether that be having financial stability, for example, having a decent income or even having a job; Or that the financial burden affects the ability of students to have a future family.

    This has been a detriment to both the college and the student, as the students have not been able to pay, ultimately leaving them vulnerable to the housing crisis.

    What this is conveying is one of the negative effects of the financial crisis for students, as it goes outside of student debt, even though student debt is the main contributor.

    What is defined as a crisis is different to each person as it depends on the severity of it, as well as what they can do solve it.

    The rising costs of college has put students into financial burdens that affect them outside of school, whether it be finding a job with an income higher than their loans, or even starting a family.

    This has been detrimental to students and their families, as not being able to pay for college has pushed made them vulnerable to the housing crisis.

    What this is conveying is one of the negative effects that the costs for college has on students.

  3. This issue is then perpetuated by American society’s outlook on sleep where sayings like, “sleep is for the weak” and “I’ll sleep when I’m dead”, arise; they will definitely sleep when they are dead, and sooner than they think, since not sleeping gets them closer to their death beds. It seems as though there is treat it like a chore when it is something that should be as valued as money. It became part of the culture to not sleep and we try to logistically excuse it by prioritizing money before our health; this then takes a heavy toll on our mental health. I kept a journal where I would write my thoughts, experiences, and emotions throughout the day in order to track my progress; to make sure that I would wake up at the time am supposed to, I took precautions in setting up five alarms each on three different devices; phone, alarm clock, and Google Home. The fact of the matter is that since there is nothing definitive about sleep just yet, besides from it being a necessity to our everyday lives, there are also no definitive ways in which we could solve this crisis.

    This issue is then perpetuated by American society’s outlook on sleep where sayings like “Sleep is for the weak” and “I’ll sleep when I’m dead” arise. They will definitely sleep when they’re dead and sooner than they think. It seems as though that it is treated like a chore when it is, in fact, something that should be as valued as money. It is part of our culture now to not sleep because our society prioritizes money over our health, which takes a hefty toll on our health. In order to track my progress, I kept a journal in which I wrote down my thoughts, emotions, and what I’ve done so far throughout the day. To make sure that I would wake up on time, I took precautions and set up five alarms each on three different devices: phone, alarm clock, and Google Home. The fact of the matter is that there’s not much concrete in sleep research, but what we do know is that it is essential to our everyday lives; therefore, sleeping is the ultimate solution to our crisis.

  4. . Parents’ income also plays a major roll in childhood obesity. Many parents just cannot afford healthy foods which tend to be very expensive. Instead, they treat them to fast, cheap, unhealthy and inexpensive foods that are usually processed and filled with chemicals.

    Income is also a prime factor of the obesity crisis in America. It might seem that the wealthier you are the more you will eat, thus the more chances of you becoming obese. But the fact of the matter is, healthy foods like greens and seafood are a lot more expensive than fast food and snacks. Many parents just cannot afford healthy foods for their children which tend to be very expensive. Instead, they treat them to fast, cheap, unhealthy and inexpensive foods that are usually processed and filled with chemicals. Their goal is to get the most full with the least amount of money spent. Livivng a healthy lifestyle may sound easy but usually requires a ton of money unless your willing to starve, which is then sometimes also very unhealthy.

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