Kips Bay’s Noise Pollution – First 2 Paragraphs

It’s five o’clock in the morning and the sirens are already blaring. The red, white, and blue flashing lights pierce through the windows. One street South, you can hear the cheers and roars of a sports  bar that has sponsors from colleges throughout the East Coast, all while happening on a Wednesday. Across the street, you hear the hammering noise and loud barks of construction workers as they begin their day shift. After getting up and walking outside, you notice that there is a massive hole in the ground, inconveniently placed where the ambulances usually take their route. It is now when you realize that this  project that may take well over a few years to finish.

The fact of the matter is, many people who live in Kips Bay have to suffer from the factors of noise pollution, and the cost of living in the neighborhood goes against what the comfort factor for the residents. Noise pollution, although loud in most areas in Manhattan, suffer in major parts in Kips Bay, specifically. The reason is due to the abundance of sport bars, meaning that there is excess noise not only during the weekends, but during major sporting events/games during the week. Tying this with the excessive number of hospitals in the neighborhood, police precincts, and fire houses, Kips Bay is a hot spot for noise pollution. When push comes to shove, many residents would have to question whether or not they would continue to live in a neighborhood with such high cost of living adjustment (COLA) and high rates of noise pollution.

One thought on “Kips Bay’s Noise Pollution – First 2 Paragraphs

  1. Your lead is interesting, but lacks immediacy; that is, I feel that your sentences are passive rather than active. In addition, I would avoid using words and phrases such as “The fact of the matter is,” and “The reason is due to this.” Show me, show me, show me through powerful descriptive words that paint the problem that lies in your article.

    You are an articulate writer, but I need to see the characters in action.

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