So far, I am still struggling with the second revision. Strengthening my thesis statement is one of the things that I am still struggling with. Explaining and analyzing the evidence is another thing that I am struggling with. However, I am satisfied with the amount of quotes I have so far. If I find more ways to prove my thesis statement, I will add more quotes.
My classmates underlined many of the summarization in my first draft. I am going to fix the things that I am missing as well like the analysis. Turning the summarization into analysis is still a problem for me. I am planning to e-mail Professor Kaufman my thesis statement to make sure if my thesis statement is strong enough.