My revision for my essay is going well. I am in the stage of writing where I am working on adding analysis and quotes in my essay. I am really happy that Professor Kaufman gave us a chance to give her our first draft of this essay because I believe it gave me a clear sense of what I need to work on. I am really worried about my thesis because it is not clear. The point I am trying to convey in my essay is that through Bartleby’s story, Melville is trying to show that when a human is out of the norm they are seen as different, rather than unique. The problem that I am having right now is that I don’t know whether or not a good thesis or do I need to make it more specific. This is a major problem because I am stuck at this stage and my essay revolves around this whole idea.
Once I can work pass this problem, I can support my argument more in depth. I am already working on the analysis and quotes which will help me support my argument. I am in the process of crossing out and adding details, fixing the wording of sentences. Since “Bartleby, The Scrivener” is a long story it is very hard to narrow down important quotes that is used in the text because there are so many of them and I do not want my paper to have quotes after quotes. Therefore, I am making sure all the quotes that I am using proves my argument. However, despite the problems, overall I am enjoying writing my paper and making sure it is the best it can be.
