In a world that’s more interconnected than ever before we are in an age of global tribal mentality. Groups of individuals all across the world can band together due to like-minded ideas and beliefs. However, this makes it easier than ever before to spread ideas of hate and ignorance. This is evident in the wide-spread negative stigma of modern art.
Terry Smith, author of “The State of Art History: Contemporary Art” touches on ideas of how modern art is presented in today’s society and “Feasibility and Admissibility of Mob Mentality Defenses” written by the Harvard Law Review Association speaks on the psychology behind hive-minded groups. Both articles’ arguments rely on statistics, deductive reasoning but differ in their writing styles.
Majority of their claims on the role of ignorance in public perception both rely on statistics. Both articles rely on deduction by presenting events and lack convention and use of pathos. “simply put, neither the defense’s nor the prosecution’s theory of mob psychology will assist fact-finders who have no way of choosing between the theories other than to consult their own ideas of how people behave in mobs
The styles are different as “Feasibility and Admissibility of Mob Mentality Defenses” takes a more argumentative approach and gives evidence to support the argument while “The State of Art History: Contemporary Art” is more of a retelling of events in a linear path.
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Hi Aqib,
It seems your draft is a bit unfinished which is fine. Your intro is good however, I would put a larger emphasis on the art aspect of the negativity, as it seems a bit of an afterthought, even though its the focus of your writing. Your thesis statement is good as it distinctly states the 3 similarities or differences. Your topic sentences are also good as they state everything they need to. There are some grammatical errors that you might need to look over. Good luck on the rest of your essay!
Hello Aqib,
The topic is definitely an intriguing one and im excited to see where you go from here. Like Sadman said, there’s definitely some writing missing which can definitely bring your essay somewhere very nice.