Monthly Archives: October 2014

Revising Attitudes

When I imagine revising writing, I picture it as taking my work and seeing why it isn’t perfect. How at times it could be highlighting the wrong points. Is the message presented clearly? and Is it enjoyable to read?

In my Senior year of High School I had almost finished my 8-page research paper on an uninteresting topic and during my revision I deleted the whole thing and started again. From this experience I became more attentive to how my writing sounded to others and not just how it sounded in my head. From my experience the very first step in the paper writing process is to write the first draft and then afterward revise it, change around sentences or paragraphs to have the paper better portray your arguments in a clear manner. and then lastly edit and proofread, check for typos, redundancy and grammatical errors.

In Revising Attitudes by Dethier. Deither writes ” Revision is trivial, the nitpicky correcting of superficial niceties.” In the past I have thought of revisions in this matter . I viewed revisions as simply proofreading and editing and failed to recognize what it truly was. Dethier also mentions “Revision is drudgery; only the first draft is creative” This statement I also found to be true. If you go into the revision process with a negative attitude you will find that you are simply going over work you know way too much which can be extremely boring, However if you go into the revisions with an attitude of “How can I improve this paper?” You’ll find revisions to be one of the most helpful processes you could undergo in your history of being a writer.

Writer’s Notes: Rhetorical Analysis

At this stage in my writing process I have chosen two articles in which I will be discussing how rhetoric writing is used to persuade the reader to think a certain way. I have spent a few hours on this assignment thus far and have almost completed my outline. While at first, I thought the topic was something that was important, as I spend more time with this paper I began to develop the true purpose of the assignment which i believe is to learn how authors use rhetoric writing to develop your own point of view. The focus of the paper is on the writing and how it is being shown to the reader rather than the topic.

Formal Proposal

Gaza – Israel rocket fire in summer 2014

 

Article 1: http://www.nytimes.com/2014/09/04/world/middleeast/israel-gaza-hamas-fatah-.html

 

Article 2:

http://www.foxnews.com/world/2014/09/01/after-gaza-war-israeli-children-go-back-to-school-after-spending-summer-in-bomb/

 

For my rhetoric paper I am analyzing the two sides of the rockets that were being fired between gaza and Israel this past summer. The first article I am using is fro the New York Times which is (contrary to popular belief) an Anti-Israel paper I will analyze different aspects of the article such as the language that is used and the pictures that are displayed. The Second article I will be using is from Fox News, usually a Pro Israel Anti-Gaza news source. With this article I will also be looking at the language and pictures that are displayed. I chose this topic because I feel that every news outlet in the world takes a side in this conflict and there is not one source that strictly displays the facts without bias. While I know it is virtually impossible to write a paper without showing a side I will do my best. This is a topic I feel a deep connection to. Last year I spent the year in Israel doing religious study. Being an orthodox Jew I developed a strong connection to the land of Israel. And being in Israel I acknowledged first hand the different viewpoints people had on the actions that were taken by the IDF, Israel’s army. My entire life I have been exposed to propaganda from both sides. Although looking for bias in articles is something I have done before especially with regard to the Arab-Israel conflict. I am looking forward to get a chance to spend a lot of time on analyzing different articles and bringing out the unobvious bias clues given off by these news sources.