Feature Writing

Born Identity: One Soldier’s Story of Transition

https://psmag.com/born-identity-one-soldiers-story-of-transition-426af8edeb7f#.4rqmmmxp5

The story follows Sergeant Major Edward Long, now Jennifer Long, in her path as a soldier, having served for 30 years, and a transgender.

It opens with  Edward Long, in eastern Afghansitan and a tough situation he was in as he was under attack.

In the first few paragraphs, because the story is talking about Edward Long’s history in the war, before he was fully transitioned, the writer referred to Jennier as “he.”

Then the writer switches to “she” and makes note of this to the reader that he is switching pronouns.

After the writer introduces Jennifer, he goes onto her past as Jennifer struggled with identity issues while serving the military.

The story ends with a list of what Jennifer has done for the LGBT community and what she continues to do.

The narrative does become a full circle because it opens up with Edward and ends with Jennifer being a strong activist.

The Structure of “Graduation Day”

I read a longform article from GQ called “Graduation Day.”

This lengthy feature is worth the time put into reading it. It’s a profile of 8 young students who experienced the deadly earthquake that occurred in Japan in 2012. Over 25,000 people were killed, but these children survived. And they shared their stories and memories with Chris Heath from GQ. The memories of principals and bus drivers are also written about, adding additional depth.

I was so intrigued by the article’s structure. Not only did he go from discussing one student to another, and how they contrasted from one another, but he spaced it out in 4 major sections: Before, March 11, 2011, 2:46 P.M., After, and Since. I think this was an incredible idea because it walks you through the events leading up to the event, how it was in the moment, the immediate aftermath, and how the future was affected by the earthquake. This is an effective method for a reader that knew little, or maybe even nothing, about the disaster.

I also think Chris used his own personal voice very professionally in the piece. He used an appropriate amount of sympathy that is needed in natural disasters. There was also one point in the story where he described his own personal feelings as he was traveling to meet one of the principals. I think this put an outsider’s thoughts into perspective that brought something extra to the story.

http://www.gq.com/story/japan-tohoku-tsunami-earthquake-disaster?printable=true

Obama Reckons With A Trump Presidency

David Remnick’s article “Obama Reckons with a Trump Presidency” displays the reaction within the White House before and after the Election of 2016. Remnick begins the article with a scene of the aftermath of the election. The display of defeat to the Democratic party left not only the White House staff but numerous Americans. Remnick ends the introductory paragraph by illustrating how Obama seeks to still the storm that brewed after Trump was elected President. Remnick introduces Obama who projects the idea that it isn’t the end of the world.

Through the repeated use of Obama’s quotes and scholarly articles detailing philosophies, Remnick tells the story of Obama’s perspective and his thoughts on everything that has occurred. White House staff are utilized in and out with their personal accounts on the matters that the country will face after the election.

The article is written in the past tense. The sections are separated with the account of the beginning, the middle and the end. The beginning starts with Obama’s recollection of Trump being introduced to the political scene in 2008. Remnick details the forthcoming of Trump’s win through a passage of a philosopher that said change was imminent. The middle tells the accounts of Obama and the White House staff in the election of 2016. Displays the high hopes for Hilary Clinton to win the Presidency with the current democratic President by her side. Details and circumstances surrounding the election build. The end details the comments of Obama after Trump won the election. The scene of a reality unfamiliar to Americans as Trump and Obama sat side by side. Looking forward, Obama sets his sight on helping the nation remain strong with providing thoughts of hope in the end.

The nutgraf appears in the third paragraph. The account of Trump wining the presidency and the residing disheartened Americans display the past compared to the present.

The writer weaves in quotes from Obama on specific timeframes. He also utilizes the expert quote of Matt Lauer, a journalist of the Today Show and David Simas, Obama’s political director in the middle of the passage with situations surrounding the Election of 2016. The use of experts strengthen Obama’s image of a America that needs to stand together now more than ever. Accounts of reactionary comments from White House staff weigh in on the circumstances surrounding the White House from the beginning of the article to the middle.

The narrative does come full circle in the end. Remnick began the article with Obama’s encouragement to the citizens of America to remain hopeful. Despair laid in the hearts of many Americans believing it could be the end of the world but Obama emphasized otherwise. Through recounts of Obama’s legacy, Remnick ends the article by reemphasizing that the world is not ending. The article ends with a quote that was said when Obama was first elected as President: “If there is anyone out there who still doubts that America is a place where all things are possible,” he said, “tonight is your answer.” The full circle of past to present reference and the end of the Obama legacy details the hope Obama rests in the citizens to look forward to the future.

Longreads structure

Link: http://www.nybooks.com/daily/2016/11/10/trump-election-autocracy-rules-for-survival/

The structure begins with quotes following Trump’s presidential victory. Gessen criticizes those who have tried to normalize the recent turn of events by reminding everyone that Trump is not a normal scenario, and his agenda – from the campaign to his proposals – are not to be forgotten.

She circles back to the idea of Trump as an autocrat by what he has said – from being a chronic liar to hateful rhetoric against minorities – to what he has done – avoid taxes and live as a sexual predator.

But she doesn’t just provide this as opinion. She shows us that she is just the person to remind us that America is about to be ruled by an autocrat with support from all sides: she has lived in autocracies most of her life, and has spent much of career writing about Vladimir Putin’s Russia.

While autocrats and their system expect you to play by their rules, Gessen gives us a few rules of our own to follow. The list format further enhances the notion of being “ruled”.

Each rule circles back to Trump as an autocrat and how you can prevent being blinded by him even further. But the final rule reminds us that this isn’t Russia, Trump will not reign supreme forever, and we can move forward – if we keep these rules in mind.

OP ED : Qatar hosting FIFA 2022 World Cup? Why?

Even though Russia 2018 FIFA (International Federation of Association Football) World Cup has not even started yet, its successor Qatar 2022 FIFA World Cup has been making headlines in the sports world recently.

Many construction workers have passed away because of the excessive heat while building the new soccer stadiums. Qatar are building five new stadiums by 2020. According to the Washington Post there have been 964 deaths of migrants from India, Nepal and Bangladesh in 2012 and 2013. Amnesty International a human rights organization released a report earlier this year of how migrants’ work has suffered labor abuse. Such as living in camp conditions, being paid from little to nothing, being threaten to be deported back to their countries.

What FIFA officials have done? Nothing. It is time for FIFA to take action and find another country to host the 2022 World Cup.

After the Amnesty International released its report on migrants workers labor abuse. FIFA officials responded with a statement. “We are fully aware of the risks facing construction workers in Qatar and we are confident that the measures taken by the Supreme Committee for Delivery and Legacy are the appropriate ones and have already improved the situation for migrant workers working on FIFA World Cup construction sites,” said FIFA Head of Sustainability Federico Addiechi.

FIFA has always said that it does not have responsibility for wider contemporary Issues in the countries the world cup is hosting, but it is working with the Qatar government to solve the issues of migrant workers.
Qatar government officials have responded to the Amnesty International report “The government of the State of Qatar fully intends to meet the highest standards with regard to labor conditions and would welcome comparative data on the progress that has been made.” Eight Construction Workers died during the construction of World Cup stadiums at Brazil in 2014. According to Amnesty International report more thn 36,000 workers could be forced to labor as the construction of stadium are speeding up.

Labor abuses have not been the only issues, but the climate. The World Cup has always been held in summers in the Northern Hemisphere (May – August). In Qatar during the summer months temperatures could hit to 122 °F. It has cause concern for the safety of players and the fans that come all over the world to see this event.

A Study conducted by University of Freiburg in Germany in 2014 by Dr. Andreas Matzarakis and researcher Dominik Frohlich. They stated, “The results show that this kind of event may be not appropriate for visitors, if it is placed during months with extreme conditions. For Doha, this is the period from May to September, when conditions during a large majority of hours of the day cause strong heat stress for the visitors. A more appropriate time would be the months November to February, when thermally comfortable conditions are much more frequent.” said in the report.

Qatar are building advanced air-conditioning technology that would cool stadiums, but concern is when fans leave the stadium and wonder off to visit other places. FIFA officially announced the 2022 World Cup it will take place from November 21 to December 18 for the first time ever.

If the World Cup was to be moved, it has to come to the United States. The U.S was second in the votes for the bid for the 2022 World Cup. The United States has already many stadiums throughout the 50 states to host games. Over the past years soccer have increased interest for American. According to the latest ranking by therichest.com Soccer came in 7th place for the most popular sport in America. Based on Nielsen fast nationals, the World Cup final between Argentina and Germany averaged about 17.3 million viewers.

As the 2018 Russia FIFA World Cup approaches, it is time for FIFA to makes it decision and replace Qatar with The U.S. To host the 2022 FIFA World Cup.

Class Agenda – November 16

Workshop pitches

Homework assignment: Find a feature story that is roughly between 1,500 and 3,000 words (@longreads is a great place to look) and write a blog post that breaks down how the piece is structured. You can sum it up or write it as an outline, but these are the kinds of things I want to see you paying attention to:

How does it open? Is it in a scene? Introducing us to a character? How often do we return to that character in that same timeframe?

Is it written in past or present tense?

How does the writer organize the narrative? Are there sections? What defines each section? Where does the nut graph appear?

At what point and in what way does the writer provide background, expert quotes, statistics?

Does the narrative come full circle in the end? Does the kicker echo certain themes that have appeared throughout the story?

Op-ex: Xenophobia in the United Kingdom

When 52 percent of Britons voted to leave the European Union on June 23, few may have expected that the vote would spark a right-wing movement and xenophobia. Five months later, the country’s immigrant community is faced with anti-immigration graffiti and derogatory comments.

This behavior shows a dangerous shift in the attitude of British citizens. With the refugee crisis plaguing Europe and right-wing parties gaining support throughout the continent, a rise in anti-immigration behavior could harm the country in the long run.

According to a report published by the European Commission Against Racism and Intolerance, the United Kingdom witnessed a significant increase in racial and religious hate crimes.

According to the report, there were 52,528 hate crimes recorded by the police in a one-year period between 2014 and 2015. Of those, 42,930 were race-based hate crimes, while 3,254 were based on religion. This shows an 18 percent increase from that same period between 2013 and 2014, with the largest increase–43 percent–found in religious hate crime.

However, there is also an issue with unreported hate crimes. The report cites a survey conducted by the Crime Survey for England and Wales, which found that there is an estimate of 222,000 hate crimes per year, 106,000 of which are driven by race. This, the document states, means that only one in four hate crimes are reported.

The report claims that hate crime is caused by hate speech, which has been steadily increasing in the past few years.

“ECRI considers hate speech particularly worrying not only because it is often a first step in the process towards actual violence but also because of the pernicious effects it has on those who are targeted emotionally and psychologically,” the report states.

As a result of this behavior, many immigrants–including the estimated 850,000 Polish immigrants who live in the United Kingdom–feel as if they are no longer welcome in the country.

Major publications, including The Washington Post, published stories about the growing hostilities. The article cited one incident in Cambridgeshire, East Anglia, where people distributed laminated cards with “Leave the EU/No more Polish vermin” written on them in English and Polish.

The ECRI also reported a high number of violent race-based hate crimes directed at the United Kingdom’s Muslim community. In one instance, an 82-year-old man was murdered on his way back from Friday prayers. In particular, the Muslim community in the United Kingdom is often accused of not integrating with the British values.

The report states that a lot of this behavior is caused by the politician’s rhetoric, especially when coming from members of the UK Independence Party who tend to speak out about immigration. When Bulgaria and Romania got their rights to visa-free travel within the European Union, politicians affiliated with UKIP and the Conservative Party claimed that people from those countries would “flood” and “invade” the U.K. labor force.

However, the response in hate crime is not even across all of United Kingdom. According to the referendum results, 62 percent of the Scottish electorate voted to remain in the European Union. Bernard Agrest, who spent his past year in the University of Edinburgh earning his master’s degree, admitted that while the country’s attitudes toward other races and religions remained largely unchanged, he did notice that the messages sent by the pro-Brexit groups were, at times, xenophobic, especially when it came to the Syrian refugees.

“The Syrian Refugee Crisis was also a tipping point,” Agrest said. “The leaders of the Brexit movement–Farage and Johnson–came up with an ad of a ‘breaking point’ for the country and it showed a line of refugees.”

Agrest added that the Brexit campaign as a whole was filled with inconsistencies.

“When you look at the leaders of the UKIP party … they really propped up a lot of sketchy statistics and facts to say how much the U.K. was losing by being part of the UK,” Agrest said in an interview.

Back in the days, people used to say that the sun never set on the British Empire. Its colonies spanned the entire globe, from the 13 American colonies to India and South Africa. It ruled over dominions and protectorates that spoke many languages and followed different cultures than Britain’s. In many of those places, the British have a dark past, from Boer concentration camps to the famines in India.

After all that violence, the British people are, once again, committing violent crimes against the people who immigrated into their country. Some of those people come from the countries that were previously colonized by the United Kingdom. Others, like Poles, came to United Kingdom to find a better future.

The United Kingdom is made up of multicultural countries that have welcomed foreign resident for decades. Now, when the economy is not doing as well as it should, groups and parties like UKIP decided to put the blame for the country’s situation on immigrants.

Immigrants, however, contribute to the economic success of the United Kingdom. The same people who face xenophobia on daily basis work as construction workers, plumbers, salespeople, technical workers and waitresses, along with other positions. They work the jobs that they are qualified for and live their lives alongside other British citizens in order to give back to the country that gave them a more financially secure life. It is wrong to blame the country’s economic problems on people who are simply trying to lead a better life.

Instead of blaming the immigrant communities for the United Kingdom’s economic standing, the U.K. government should work with its immigrant communities to improve the situation of the country as a whole.

Teachers and Students After Trump’s Election

Trump proposes to remove Loan and Financial Aid options for College Students and plans to cut out jobs for many professors, teachers, and faculty and staff at state universities as well.

As such, my story might include quotes or statements from teachers or students who face threats as it relates to their academic endeavors, and if they have any plans or actions that they intend to take in order to minimize any potential injuries that Trump’s policies may have for their lives.

Last but not least it may be worth it to put out statements or quotes from any teachers or students who believe that there will be improvements in their academic universe after Trump’s election as well.

So that way thoughts or discussions from both sides may apply (but only if it is possible for me to secure the necessary sources for all sides of this issue)

Feature Article (Pitch Update)

I will interview Mandeep Singh from Richmond Hill about his experiences growing up.

-It is difficult to interview the older generation because they feel uncomfortable talking about and their attitude is to accept discrimination as a part of life.

News peg: 5-time marathon runner was harassed during the NY marathon this month.

I want to write about ongoing discrimination of Sikhs due to people confusing them with Muslims in the U.S. and their long history of being discriminated against (i.e. genocide in 1984 and even famous figures like Gandhi unwillingness to accept them) and how it led up to present day. I would talk about Sikhs and their unique identity, independent from the Islamic States.

There are many people I can interview in the Sikh Temples as everyone has had history of discrimination in the U.S. post-9/11.

Final Pitch

Nassau Coliseum has been Long Island’s home arena since 1972. A lot of New Yorkers have described the venue as a dump and with the arrival of the Barclay Center in Brooklyn and Madison Square Garden’s billion dollar transformation debuting in 2013, many questioned if this would be the end of the Nassau Coliseum. The New York Islanders relocating from Long Island to play hockey in Brooklyn has been the driving downhill force of the coliseum. Luckily for Long Islanders, it recently underwent a long overdue $130 million renovation and will open with Billy Joel followed by the Harlem Globetrotters in April of 2017.

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I hope to interview someone involved in the renovation. I also have contact with people that work for Madison Square Garden and Barclay Center and look to see how they feel about the venues reemergence. Billy Joel does perform at the Garden for his 80th show on November 21st and I will be around the arena to ask some of his staff what to look forward to when they head to Billy Joel’s home arena in April. Lastly, I’ll interview people from my hometown in Long Island to see how they feel about the recent transformation.