FIRST THESIS: In society money helps individuals to sustain themselves, it’s also the tool which indirectly gives power and status among other things. The issue with it is that it often compromises our morals and values, this can inevitably get in the way of relationships which will eventually hurt the feelings of individuals. In Feng Menglong’s narrative, “Du Tenth Sinks the Jewel Box in Anger,” there is clearly more emphasis on money than love from Li Jia and this leads to Du Tenth’s heart ending up broken.
SECOND THESIS; People’s opinion on our decisions may not matter much to a person, this is not the case when it comes from close family member. For instance a father’s opinion can shape the life of a son, In Feng Menglong’s narrative, “Du Tenth Sinks the Jewel Box in Anger,” Li Jia is scared of his father’s opinion on his feelings towards Du Tenth(a prostitute), there is an emphasis on Li Jia honoring his father but this honor clashes with his feelings towards Du Tenth. Unfortunately situations like this one must be brave and select the right path, this varies from individual to individual.
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JMERLE // Oct 3rd 2015 at 2:50 pm
Jonathan,
Both of your statements are interesting, but a bit scattered. Try writing them, as I suggested, in one sentence each, then see what you’ve got. This will force you to hone and focus your intent.
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