Natalia Malaver, Yohana Gonzalez, Alexandra Lopez, Malik Indrissou
“” I’ve made my home next door to you” (p.592)
In this poem, there are two versions- the secular and sacred. It was very interesting to see that the only thing that changed in the poem was merely the distinction between “she” and “He.” Another important aspect of this poem is the constant repetition of the phrase, “without a word being said.” These two things are essential because it changes the entire view of the poem. In the secular version, it seems as though he is so in love with a woman and therefore, there is no need for words. However, in the sacred version, when it is turned to “He” it changes the entire meaning. One important detail is that the word “He” is always capitalized, thus, referring directly to God, since God’s name should be always be referred to with a capitalized letter. When you begin to think about the poem in this way, the poem begins to make more sense. Ghalib was criticizing God for his failure to actually communicate with his followers, and not provide for them. Ghalib states, “You still can’t find my whereabouts without my help, without a word being said” This is merely hinting at that human is greater than God and that we shouldn’t be looking up at someone that “rules” our lives, “without a word being said.”
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JMERLE // Oct 24th 2015 at 12:44 pm
Natalia, Yohana, ALexandra, and Malik,
You make some very good points, but here is my response to the paragraph form:
You should begin with your topic (specific theme) which seems to actually start in the fourth sentence (In the secular version …). You then go on to mention a second theme (the religious theme) in the next two sentences. Remember to just pick one theme for a topic sentence.
From your quote, you seem to be developing the second theme. Your quote is a good one, and your explanation is also quite nice!
Remember, get started immediately with your topic sentence!
Grade: 8/10