- It could be argued that the narrator of Saikaku’s, Life of a Sensuous Woman, purposely speaks of her experiences in order to express the subservient position women held.
- It could be said that Moliere’s “Tartuffe” is filled with strong, colorful individual characters who are intentionally backed with moral standpoints in order to teach issues of interest.
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October 1, 2015 Written by Brandon Andujar | 4 Comments
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k.matthes // Oct 2nd 2015 at 12:09 am
Both of your arguments have great topics, however, they can be more specific. I think your first thesis is very interesting and could be easily related to the roles of women throughout history. To make the argument stronger, you can take out “It could be argued”, and just have your thesis as, “The narrator of Saikaku’s, Life of a Sensuous Woman, speaks of her experiences in order to reveal the subservient position that women held.” By saying “it could” it suggests that there is an argument that “it couldn’t”. Overall, great ideas!
y.kim // Oct 2nd 2015 at 12:24 am
These are good ideas! I agree that through the narrator’s story, she is spreading awareness of women’s roles. I would actually go with the first thesis because it is more specific that the second thesis. If you do decide to use the first one, maybe you can mention the other women in the narrative to portray how women are being mistreated and dominated by men. The second thesis seems a bit general. In order to make it more specific, you should narrow down to one moral and use different characters that represent that moral.
yg111658 // Oct 2nd 2015 at 11:27 pm
I really like your ideas. I think you have very interesting topics for your essay’s, regarding the subservient position women held and how Tartuffe teaches moral standpoints to teach issues of interest. However although it is a thesis, it should be treated more as a fact, it is more trying convince your reader that your opinion is valid and your going to prove to them why. So, I think you should consider the way you begin your thesis, it makes it sound doubtful. You could also add a little more detail to both thesis, but other than that you have very interesting topics that you have developed to create a very interesting essay.
JMERLE // Oct 3rd 2015 at 3:28 pm
Brandon,
In both you make valid observations, but they are both much too broad. In the second, it’s almost as if you’re restating the topic. For a thesis, you need to focus the topic quite a bit. Your first statement is your most specific, but you still need to decide what those experiences (overall) consist of and what you mean by subservience, which is a very general word. You need to be as specific as you can in the thesis, to help guide your writing (and the reader’s understanding of your intent) throughout the essay.
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