I now challenge every person whom reads this post to find a poem and switch the lines around, it could be a pattern like mine or it could be just switching lines. The challenge is to make the poem either funny, better or make more sense by switching lines. I don’t think that switching words will be as challenging as whole lines. Please comment or post or refer us to the original poem and post the revised poem so we can see what you have done. If the poem is too long you can just post the lines that you find important to revise. You can also emit words and add punctuation marks to help make your point. Good luck =)
I picked “The Art Of Response” by Audre Lorde and the pattern i used is to pick the first line and the last line, the second line and the line before last and etc’. I hope you like it 😉
The first was incorrect| changed the question
The second was| the fifteenth
*Sorry, the third trimmed its toenails| near a toilet in the Big Apple circus
*on the vatican steps| the fourteenth sold cocaine and shamrocks
the fourth went mad| refused
the fifth| the thirteenth
nursed a grudge until it bore twins| that provides doctors for central Harlem
that drank poisoned grape juice in Jonestown| processed funds from a third world country
the sixth wrote a book about| the twelfth
the seventh| next to Eternal truth
argued a case before the supreme court| and the eleventh dug their graves
against taxation on girl scout cookies| revenge on the opposition
the eighth held a news conference| the ninth and tenth swore
while four black babies| for a hospital bed to die in
and one other picketed New York City
Poems might have subliminal messages and they can hit it out, have it clearly written, and have it hidden inside them and the only way to find them is through a logarithm. So play around with your poems and see what you get, the message is always different.
