Original précis:

The main claim that Fernandez is trying to make is that she could not convey her opinions and judgments on the Mumia case/ Adegbile DOJ Nominee case because Fox news had its own right wing agenda; and essentially they are using the innocent Mumia to ruin Adegbile’s campaign. She then goes on to talk about the reasons why she feels that Mumia is innocent. Her arguments include descriptions of police evidence tampering, problems in Mumia’s trial and the mysterious fourth person at the scene of the crime. Fernandez uses testimony from the officer assigned to watch Mumia, reporters at the scene, and interviews from Mumia’s family. With this evidence she wants to prove that Mumia Is innocent and that conservatives are using him to spread an anti-liberal message. This is through linking Mumia with Adegbile, who is a democrat, in hopes that he will not get the DOJ seat.

Revised Précis

The main claim that Fernandez is trying to make is that she could not accurately convey her opinions and judgments on the Mumia case/ Adegbile DOJ Nominee case because Fox news had its own right wing agenda; and essentially they are using the innocent Mumia to ruin Adegbile’s campaign. She claims the news outlets motive for negatively connecting Adegbile to Mumia is “to associate that with Debo Adegbile so as to strategically energize a right-wing agenda against the gains of the civil rights movement (Fernandez).”She then goes on to talk about the reasons why she feels that Mumia is innocent. Her arguments include descriptions of police evidence tampering, problems in Mumia’s trial and the mysterious fourth person at the scene of the crime. Fernandez uses testimony from the officer assigned to watch Mumia, reporters at the scene, and interviews from Mumia’s family. With this evidence she wants to prove that Mumia Is innocent and that conservatives are using him to spread an anti-liberal message. This is through linking Mumia with Adegbile, who is a democrat, in hopes that he will not get the DOJ seat.

Fernandez, Johanna. “What Fox News and Hannity Blocked Me From Saying: Mumia as Fuel for Right-Wing Agenda?” The Huffington Post. TheHuffingtonPost.com, 11 Jan. 2014. Web.

I feel that you are asking us to do this assignment not only for practice, but also to see how closely the different ways of incorporating sources are actually intertwined. I all ready had my summary down, with a brief paraphrase toward the end, and my hopes are  that the addition of the direct quotes pulls both together. I picked that particular one because it is from Fernandez, so it built credibility and also because it was so striking. I essentially felt that it shouldn’t be altered too much.