We all love money, you know that that’s true
We fantasize about splurging, buying the latest designer shoes
Whenever we look in our bank accounts, we feel very blue
We feel out of control, like animals in zoos
But when we look up at the class above, these huge corporate leaders
We feel insignificant, what could we have done wrong?
Like numbers on a spreadsheet, comprised in pristine ledgers
What were the secrets kept hidden from me all along?
This need for money can be very dangerous
Something you chase for extrinsic value, sounds like greed
Bankers, traders and CEO’s are not very gracious
For they all have families to feed
Constant talks of recession, rate hikes and bailouts
The public grows more confused, our heads filled with doubts
When we look at the bigger picture, we should not get this confused
We all love money, but should not let the uneducated be abused.
honestly, this really described how many people act and feel towards money. i love it!
I like this poem a lot! I think it really incapsulates how a lot of people feel about money and how important money is in our society. 😁
Money obsession is best described as “We fantasize about splurging”. I think many of us view money as necessary and it brings joy when used but when we see how much we spend it causes us to feel bad.
The last line is the perfect ending.
I like how your poem is organized. Each Stanza has important information, and it doesn’t feel like your forcing your rhymes. It was a very pleasant read that I think would pull a lot of people into your topic.
I thought this was really well done. It’s powerful, but so Zahan. The last line, wow. A good message to send the kids home happy, good man.
This was a captivating poem. The grasp of topic and ideas that you are able to discuss within such few lines was great. Each line can be pulled out by itself.
Your performance in class was moving! Are you an enjoyer of duck related paraphilia?
I really like how everything flows together and I think it describes the way people feel about money perfectly. I really enjoyed it!
I really like this poem. This line stood out to me “But when we look up at the class above, these huge corporate leaders “We feel insignificant, what could we have done wrong?” Hearing about people like Bill Gates dropping out and still becoming extremely successful makes you think about what you’re doing wrong. But with context, you realize many of these people already come from money and you’re not doing anything wrong.
Impeccable poem. Loved the flow
Amazing poem. I like your word choice!
The rhyming is so good in this poem. It was an interest read and kept my hooked.
This perfectly encapsulates the mindset of a lot of, if not most, people in a capitalist society. People are motivated by material things or just to survive.
I really like this poem, it is realistic. Many people gain pleasure through the pursuit of material things, which at the same time leads them into a spiral.
I like your poem. I think it is so cool that you can think of so many rhymes for one topic.
I love this poem, really shows the power money has on people, and how influential it is.