Directed to professor Ian:
I unfortunately did not get to read the feedback that you recently sent out on Black Board, but I do remember the things that you mentioned for my first draft. You made a lot of grammar and spelling check for me, like capitalizing names of places and companies, which I greatly appreciated. At the end, you wrote that I should finish off my essay with what I think the definition of home is and to go more in dept with it. I briefly did mention it in the beginning, however never got to give evidence or elaborate on it towards the end of the essay. This also gave me some inspiration to get to the word count minimum.