Thesis:Apple’s disagreement to help the F.B.I unlock a terrorists phone has left the government to have an advantage over the company.
I would give details on why would they want to unlock the phone. Tell the readers why Apple did what they did in the past. Give information on what the government did. Talk about what effects did each possible choice have. Talk about why the government is giving Apple such a hard time.
Yancey Ko
The thesis statement seems to be straight forward about what is going to be discussed, is specific about who is involved (Apple and the FBI) and an outcome of two parties disagreeing with what is being proposed. Reading the outline of the thesis looks to be a plan to analyze this story well, but I don’t see where the author’s point of view is included, if that exists at all. If it does not, I understand it not being apart of the outline. I also didn’t recognize if there was a target audience for this article since the product being discussed is used worldwide. I would like to know what rights would be violated, in which territories if Apple unlocks their phones. Is this only talking about the USA?
Karia Hill
Yancey, please read, again, the assignment sheet. As Karia mentions above, you are to analyze the effectiveness of an author addressing and reaching a specific demographic, in a specific article, essay, or speech. Please look carefully, again, at the Essay #2 assignment sheet!