Assigment #2

Alberto Ramirez

ENG 2150

18 February 2024

A Teachable Moment in My Life

The game of basketball played a big role in my life, serving as a foundation for both my abilities and my goals. However, due to injuries and my lack of drive and dedication, led me to not continue pursuing playing basketball. In spite of the difficulties, I was able to get an understanding of the significance of adjusting to, and persisting through, adversity. Although it was challenging for me to go outside of my comfort zone, doing so allowed me to become aware of new options and views. 

 When I was younger, basketball was a significant part of my life, but I was not aware of the changes that were about to take place. As I got to high-school, the role that basketball played in my life began to shift. When I quit playing basketball and went on to other things, I had no way of knowing the difficulties and hardships that were waiting for me in the future. I decided to give up on basketball and refocus my energy on other aspects of my life. I gained a better understanding of patience and strength through playing the game. This experience has taught me that switching my priorities does not always indicate a lack of strength, but rather may result in new and unexpected possibilities and opportunities. As I look back on it, I realize that it led to a path that was more satisfying and offered up new opportunities for me. While navigating through this period of transition, I started exploring various interests and uncovering new talents.

During my time in middle school, I was singularly focused on becoming a better basketball player. All of my spare time and every ounce of energy that I had were spent developing my talents and participating in games. Nevertheless, my dreams were cut short when I tore my ACL, which occurred during my freshman year of high school. At the time, I probably could have bounced back from that, but I let the comparison of others get the better of my self-esteem when it came to my abilities. My confidence in the court had been destroyed, I was really heartbroken by this setback, and I had a hard time coming to grips with the concept of giving up something that had dominated my life for such a significant amount of time. I was able to discover latent skills and open myself up to new experiences by letting go of my love for basketball. These discoveries have had a significant impact on my future pursuits. I decided to take advantage of the chance to discover new hobbies and passions rather than ruminating on what may have been done differently. Hobbies such as gaming, content creation, and PC building. This taught me how important it is to be strong and flexible, which allowed me to gain skills that have helped me a lot as I’ve dealt with problems in high school.

At first, this made me feel like I had failed because I had given up on my dream. But as I thought about it more, I realized that letting go of one dream can sometimes lead to new chances and growth as a person. Being aware of this fact led me to discover other skills and hobbies that have finally changed the course of my life. As I look back, I’m thankful for the lessons this event taught me and how it changed me into the person I am now.

After quitting basketball in high school, it taught me a valuable lesson about being strong and flexible. I found new hobbies and skills that have been very important in forming my future goals, even though it was hard to let go of something that had been a big part of my life for a long time. This really opened my eyes to the idea that giving up on a dream can sometimes lead to growth and opportunities you didn’t expect. It taught me how important it is to keep an open mind and be able to change when things get tough. I thought it was a waste of ability and promise, and I felt guilty when I gave up playing basketball and was unsure about it too. However, as I looked into other hobbies and interests, I saw that life had a lot more to offer than just one love. These new interests and skills have not only made my life better, but they have also given me new options for the future. This experience has also taught me how important it is to be able to change when things go wrong. I was used to having a strict routine and a clear way to get better at basketball. I had to get used to a new schedule and find new ways to reach my goals when I had to give it up.

4 replies on “Assigment #2”

Hi Alberto!

I enjoyed reading your story. I think something you might want to work on is instead of stating how you feel try showing it through descriptive language. This might help your story become more engaging. Other than that, I think it’s good.

Hi Alberto,

Your story was relatable. I also used to play basketball but gave up not due to injury but lack of dedication as well.

Here are some thoughts:

-You showed how basketball played a crucial part in your life; however, I think you could organize your paragraphs in chronological order from when you were younger to high school.

-You could add more specific details, like a challenge you faced or overcame after quitting basketball

Overall, I think your story was good, especially the connection you had with basketball and how it gave you growth as a person.

Corey S.

Hi Alberto, thanks for sharing your story. Your story was relatable. I also used to play basketball but gave up not due to injury but lack of dedication as well. I also went exploring different things after quitting basketball. I have some feedback I’d like to share with you. In your story, you showed how basketball played a crucial part in your life; however, One thing I think you could do better on is, organize your paragraphs in more of a chronological. In the beginning, you talked about your younger self, and then you moved on to high school and skipped middle then went back to middle school. You can do it from when you were younger to high school to make your story more smoother and make it flow better. Another feedback I can give you is that you could add more specific details in your writing, one example I could give you is a challenge you faced or overcame after quitting basketball. You can describe in detail of how the injury to your torn ACL has affected you and your abilities. You can tell us some of the new hobbies or interests you found after giving up basketball. Overall, I think your story was good, it told us the connection you had with basketball and how it gave you growth as a person. Your message about how important to be open to change and find new this was clear and inspiring. Feel free to ask me any questions!

Hi Alberto,

Thanks for sharing your story, I really enjoyed it. I have a couple of small suggestions for improvement. Firstly, consider using descriptive language to convey your feelings rather than simply stating them. This could really help your story become more engaging. Maybe you can try to talk more about the time you played basketball. Explaining what drew you to the sport and why you were so passionate about it could add depth to your story. Then I think you could talk about the shift you had with playing basketball. In regards to your hobbies and passions try to expand on how these activities shaped you, particularly in terms of strength and flexibility. This could help provide a greater understanding for the reader. You can also talk about your recovery from the injury. I think it could add more emotion to your story. Lastly, incorporating transition words and reorganizing the structure can better improve the flow of it. This would ensure that your timeline of events is easier to follow. Overall, I think you did a good job! I think your story will resonate with a lot of readers.

Best, Kimberly

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