As the English exam date approached, I felt a mixture of excitement and anxiety. But my enthusiasm was quickly overshadowed by unforeseen circumstances. I was exhausted and unable to concentrate, I realized with growing despair that my chances of passing were slipping away, so I would not be able to do that. The day of the exam arrived, and I was so concerned about failing it. Ultimately, I took and it, however I did not a passing score to get to US universities. I felt like I had let down and tarnished my academic reputation and abilities. I tried three times more, but unfortunately, they were not successful. I was almost about to give up and forget about my dream to visit New York. (Exigence rhetoricalsituation in my life that was unexpected and created an opportunity for learning).
(Statement) The day of the exam arrived, and I was so concerned about failing it. Ultimately, I took and it, however I did not a passing score to get to US universities. I felt like I had let down and tarnished my academic reputation and abilities. I tried three times more, but unfortunately, they were not successful.
(Support) I felt a mixture of excitement and anxiety. But my enthusiasm was quickly overshadowed by unforeseen circumstances. I was exhausted and unable to concentrate, I realized with growing despair that my chances of passing were slipping away, so I would not be able to do that. The moment of failing several times taught me that setbacks are not the end but rather opportunities for growth and self-improvement. I carry the lessons of resilience, adaptability, humility, and perseverance with me as I continue my journey, knowing that failures are steppingstones toward success. I believe that each of us has the power to set goals, work tirelessly toward them, and achieve incredible things
(Question) How, can I apply to this the experience of staying motived to move forward under falling several times in my life? What steps can I take to ensure better preparedness in my future achievements and actions? What type feeling did I have after failure? What do I learn from this experience? Why did I consider it as a teachable moment in my life?
(Purpose) the purpose of sharing this experience is to increase awareness, clarify a concept, encourage critical thinking, or motivate action to readers.
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Elon Musk, one of the most well-known entrepreneurs and an immigrant who moved to US and became is the CEO and founder of multiple innovative companies, including Tesla, SpaceX, and The Boring Company. He was born in Pretoria, South Africa, and later became a Canadian citizen before eventually settling in the United States. He had failed several times in his journey to achieve his goals and dreams.
Citation: Elon Musk > the immigrant learning center. The Immigrant Learning Center. (n.d.). https://www.ilctr.org/entrepreneur-hof/elon-musk/#:~:text=After%20living%20near%20relatives%20in%20Canada%2C%20he%20came,great%20things%20are%20possible.%20I%20am%20nauseatingly%20pro-American.%E2%80%9D
I think caring about achieving success after failure is an important and meaningful topic for several reasons:
First of all, this is the best step of learning to achieve success after failure is a lesson in resilience. It teaches individual how to bounce back from setbacks, adapt, and grow in society. In addition, failure or a mistake can boost self-confidence and motivation. When we experience success after a setback, it reinforces our belief in our abilities and encourages us to set and pursue new goals.
Hi Dilnoz, unfortunately this is not the correct assignment for us to review today; the assignment asks us to analyze the rhetoric use of two articles.
Rather, you described your SSQ; the articles we choose should help answer our SSQ, however the focus here is, again, on the rhetoric analysis of the articles themselves.
Feedback on your SSQ:
The question should be a broader question that can be applicable to anyone and/or multiple situations, not just yourself. For example, instead of asking “What steps can I take to ensure better preparedness in my future achievements and actions?” You may consider asking “What ensures preparedness in someone’s future achievements and actions?”
The purpose should also be more focused, rather than provide multiple options.
I like the way you started with your experience, but I also do feel the thesis is a bit unclear. I could not really understand what exactly you will be talking about. Do the topic sentences call back to the thesis? Since there is no proper thesis, it also a little difficult to understand if you have used topic sentences which may refer back to the thesis. However, you have used sentences from the sources which can be seen as evidence, but the assignment does focus largely on the use of rhetoric devices so I would suggest that you focus on them as you go. The use of MLA is compliant as you did cite your sources. There are some grammar and punctuation errors throughout, for example, “however I did not a passing score to get to US universities” is supposed to be “however I did not GET a passing score to get to US universities”. Overall, I feel you just need to arrange all your points and address the thesis and rhetoric conventions. You have the evidences lined up and sources cited. A little effort on the grammar too and you should be good to go!
You fully focused on the SSQ whereas we should be focusing on our articles that answers the SSQ for us. The thesis is a bit unclear as well. You should focus more on the rhetoric analysis as it is the main concept of this assignment.