Kulvir wrote an interesting essay comparing and contrasting the difference urban and suburban life juxtapositioning his own experience of growing up in a village in India to his life now living in queens New York and going to school in Manhattan. It is a very well rounded essay but I feel that certain sections could be elaborated on more for example his experiences in the city or even more of what it was like to adjust to city life. I think he should also add more information from his sources such as quotes. A good statistic here and there from another study for his fourth source would also be a nice addition and go a long ways into adding credibility to his essay and making it sound more official.