In my 30-second pitch, I lacked the finesse necessary to communicate, persuasively, my case. I did make the connection while introducing myself, but I did not convey it in a confident enough way. There were too many “um’s” and a lack of fluidity.
With respect to “knowing the goal”, I knew my goal, but it wasn’t delivered in a polished enough form. I need to structure my pitch so that I convey, more strongly, the benefits the receiving party has in my proposal. More importantly, why they should reach out to me again to follow up.
Finally, in terms of body language, a rigid delivery is always a killer. I need to exude a more relaxed and natural persona when delivering any form of inter-personal communication.
Mr. Mayer,
This communication blog is a thorough assessment of your 30-second pitch. While I do not critique for grammar and mechanics in a student’s blog, there will be times when I will identify recurring errors.
For example, it would help to proofread your work for subject/verb agreement, tenses, modifiers, and run-on sentences. Taking time to routinely proofread and edit your work functions as a tool to improve both written and oral presentations.
Further, by adhering to guidelines of conciseness, clarity, coherency, and cogency, you will begin to develop a written and oral presentation style that fosters attention to your content and context.
You have the potential for success in this course. My objectives for you and your classmates is to develop transparency in your written and oral presentation. One in which the audience would have little concerns over your ability to communicate.
Nice work!
Emmett Green