The cultural and generation gap between parents and children is often a communication barrier.
We, as a society, are brainwashed with a uniform mentality to be same as everyone else.
Gunin Agarwal
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I like the ideas that you have chosen to include within your theses, but I think that you can definitely expand on the sentences a bit more. For example, in the first one, you can explain what kind of communication barriers you are speaking about. For the second one, you may want to expand on, without giving it away, what exactly a uniform mentality entails. Overall, your theses are great foreshadowing examples, but they can use specificity in the foundations of your argument.
The first thesis statement was more well put together than the second thesis statement. In the first statement, you were more specific as you listed the problem between the current and past generation and specifically mentioned it was due to their cultural and generational differences. In the second statement, you could have been more specific and added why do you think the society has a uniform mentality.
Gunin,
Your second is your most specific, and it’s a very good area to explore, but you still need to narrow this to something even more focused. In other words, which relationship do you want to examine (mother/son, father/daughter, etc.). Then, after you’ve defined the relationship, what aspect of the relationship is actually a problem (or the biggest problem). Is it private space? School or job related? Sibling rivalry? Or anything else? Once you narrow this, it could be a really enriching exploration.