For my remix draft I decided to tell my story using different types of videos and pictures and combing them into one. The audience for this video is undocumented students, their families and people who oppose the bill. The purpose of the video is to inform the audience about the Dream Act. What the Dream Act is and the benefits of it. The genre of the video is informative. The medium that I used for this project was iMovie. I used different types of videos and pictures that show what the Dream Act is. The argument that I’m trying to prove is that the The Dream Act would make a positive impact on our society and by passing this bill it would help undocumented students go to college and they would be resisting stereotypes not only that but this bill would help our economy.
One way I started my video was first presenting the cons of the Dream Act bill. I spoke about the cons that people would have about the bill but I showed them the solutions. I also spoke about statistics on how these students would help and give back to their country that they were raised in. I started my video with Donald Trump’s speech about the stereotypes of Mexicans and other cultures. I then showed a small video of immigrants telling him what they weren’t. I used my story to tell the audience that this bill could be helpful and I ended the video with what I think is a closing statement and for the audience to think about afterwards. One audio that I used through out the whole video was the song of John Lennon, “Imagine.” I think this song is appropriate because it talks about just peace and happiness. This bill does open up other issues mainly immigration and there people who are very passionate opposing immigrants. There are rallies and people tend to get overheated and fight. This song represents the opposite.
The remaking of my work into a multimedia piece has changed my project because I was able to research and find out more about this bill and hear different stories from these DREAMers. The biggest challenges that I’ve had was trying to get everything what I wanted to say in less than three minutes. I wanted to speak more about the financial aid students would get and how some students work really hard but are sometimes one step back in their education. I wanted to go more in depth but for the purpose of my video I sticked with showing the main important facts. What I like about my video was the ending because I think I did a well job at proving my point. I want my readers to focus on benefits of it and to know what the Dream Act is. I think I did well on the thesis and argument section because argued this bill from the pros and cons sides. One of my main concerns is the thesis, I’m hoping my readers know what it is that I’m trying to explain.
Tania, I felt this video was very useful in portraying your argument. I liked how you showed the Donald Trump clip and then right after used statistics to prove him wrong. That was certainly creative. Your argument of the benefits of the Dream Act were certainly clear in the video. There are so many dreamers that come to this country that have been successful, such as you so I think it was a good idea to show the impact others can have on our country as a whole. I don’t think you need to worry about the thesis because I certainly was exposed to many Dream Act benefits in the video. I think many people had a problem with making the video only 3 minutes, but I think the information you submitted were definitely important parts, and the other things you wanted to explain more can just be mentioned in the paper part. Great job! -Michal Jacobs
Tania,
To start off, I just want to let you know that I was extremely moved by your piece. I think it also had something to do with the music 🙂 Amazing song choice.
It was great and dramatic that you started off with the clip of Trump, and then followed it by fighting his words. The clip of the governor is also good. You should try to make the music blend into each other.. They end very abruptly. Hearing your personal stories and details really makes the piece.
The way the words are written are also good.. But you should try to make sure that the words that you are saying correlate to the words on the screen, even though they are on the same topic, it’s difficult for viewers to concentrate on listening and reading at the same time. But I think the combination of your voice over and the music is super powerful. The same for the infographic about the money that immigrants would bring to America.. Maybe crop it to the part that you are saying so that the viewers don’t have to worry about reading the entire thing and not knowing where to focus.
It’s really, really great though, and the ending was powerful as well.
You really took the message and completely expressed it perfectly in the time limit- I don’t think you have to worry about your thesis. It’s obvious what point you are trying to get across, and in that short time, you successfully do, without rushing it or not saying enough, and inspiring people along the way.