On Monday, we talked about a revision plan. You completed a draft of that revision plan. But it is not a final draft! We can revise our revision plan.
Let’s check in on how things are going.
Here were the questions you responded to:
- What do you love about this piece? What do you want to return to and work on more? Why? Choose “love” and not “well, this was bad” or “well, this was pretty good.” Instead, what did you enjoy working on most? What is the most exciting part of this text? Why? How do you build off of that? Or, what about this text, generally, interests you the most?
- What feedback will you incorporate do you think? Why?
- What aspects of Liao’s perspective will help guide your revision do you think? Why? How?
- What about your word choice and sentence structure? How will you revise your style in a way that best fits what you want to do in your piece and in ways your audience would appreciate?
- Write out ALL of the specific tasks you will take based on: what you love, the feedback you got, and the new constraints you have (Liao, organization, using examples, style)? Be SPECIFIC.
- What is your schedule for getting this done? Consult your writing schedule that you did for today!
Task
In a comment below, write about one thing you have started to work on as described in your revision plan and also write about if you decided you needed to change you revision plan (explain!).
After commenting below, click the button to continue.
I have started to expand on some sentences/events I wrote about and started to set up getting feedback from my group members.
I have started to go more in depth in parts of my writing, that way, my writing has a continuous flow and the audience does not feel lost. Regarding the revision plan, our group had solidify our plan and is progressing.
I have started to incorporate the contrast ideas and details for my intro. Our group gave each other feedback on what we should include and fix.
I have started to pick parts of the essay that I don’t think were pertinant enough to my point and started taking them out.
I have started to think and include more supporting evidence into the draft since I don’t have enough.
I started to draw out what I liked from my draft and would like to put into my revision. I also started writing down small bullet points and ideas to elaborate on certain points and comments mentioned in my draft to add on to the revision. Finally, I created a Word document for my Literacy Narrative Revision also.
I have started to edit specific words and phrases to change them into more interesting ones. Also I am trying to fix sentences to make them sound less boring to try and grab the readers attention.
I have started reorganizing the sequences of experiences I am using to write this paper to better state express my journey with literacy.
I have been watching some thought provoking videos lately and I have been thinking about some ideas related to my narrative that could really improve some weak points. I am making sure to write these ideas down as soon I think of them so I don’t forget them.
I’m still working on what I love and the time I set aside for writing being that life is full of surprises!
One thing is started to work on is comparison. I am using the feedback from the literacy narrative to help me do better on my rhetorical analysis.
I started to change words and delete sentences to make the story flow better