Since the second draft of the Rhetorical Analysis assignment is due April 7, now is the time to start planning (and start doing) revision (or getting that first draft done!!).
As with the Literacy Narrative assignment, I’m going to ask you to consider (but not require you to submit) a Revision Plan. If you haven’t turned in your first draft yet, you can look over whatever you have done to think about your writing plan in general.
Here are those guidelines for formulating this plan:
- It’s about love!!!! Ask yourself: What do you love about this piece? What do you want to return to and work on more? Why? Choose “love” and not “well, this was bad” or “well, this was pretty good.” Instead, what did you enjoy working on most? What is the most exciting part of this text? Why? How do you build off of that? Or, what about this text, generally, interests you the most? There will always be moments where you’ll have to revise something you don’t want to ever look at again. Still, even for something you rather not look at again (which will happen to you), finding something that attracts you to it, something that can make it a positive experience, will both motivate you and also help you to identify its strength.
- Let yourself be guided. How can you let that excitement and energy guide you? What enhances that energy? What takes away from that energy?
- Hear out others (including yourself). Part of (but not ONLY) what should inform you is the feedback you have received previously: my comments on your draft, peer response feedback, your old notes as you were working on the draft, etc.
- Task list. Begin to develop some tasks that can assist you in addressing the above. (e.g., revise this paragraph, move this section up earlier and adjust it so it fits, add this supporting argument, do this analysis and see where it takes me, do more research for secondary sources). Consider what YOU want to do with the piece and the comments you received from others.
- Be specific. As you write out your tasks, you MUST be specific. Why are you doing this task? As in, what about your writing has led you to think you should do x to enhance the essay overall? How will you do this task? As in, what specifically do you have in mind as some potential changes that would work to address the “why” of the task you chose. For example: I will add more examples or secondary sources to support the claim I make in paragraph 4, I need to show a more cohesive transition between section 3 and 4, my argument is too broad so I need to be more specific about the limits of my argument when I make the main argument early on, I want to incorporate my lessons on style to many of sentences that are a little harder to read.
- Be a planner. Finally, if helpful, begin to develop a schedule of when and how you will work on your revision. Revison (or any aspect of writing!) benefits from work that is spread out rather than work that happens all at once. A fresh mind is an asset. Backwards plan. “This is due 3/8, what do I need done by 2/24? By 2/28? By 3/4? Etc.”.
- Are there new constraints? Are there new things you have to consider now? For instance, in our Literacy Narrative assignment you have to: consider the Liao reading in terms of the sorts of things Literacy Narratives tend to do, you have to consider the genre of the piece and audience expectations for that genre, and you have to pay more attention to style (e.g., what sorts of words does your audience expect?)
Questions to Answer for Forming Revision Plan
- What do you love about this piece? What do you want to return to and work on more? Why? Choose “love” and not “well, this was bad” or “well, this was pretty good.” Instead, what did you enjoy working on most? What is the most exciting part of this text? Why? How do you build off of that? Or, what about this text, generally, interests you the most?
- What feedback will you incorporate do you think? Why?
- How will you enhance or add analysis to your draft?
- What might be a change to your thesis?
- What are some changes that you’ll make to your draft to make it fit the genre of the blog post through the medium of online writing?
- What about your word choice and sentence structure? How will you revise your style in a way that best fits what you want to do in your piece and in ways your audience would appreciate?
- Write out ALL of the specific tasks you will take based on: what you love, the feedback you got, and the new constraints you have (Liao, organization, using examples, style)? Be SPECIFIC.
- What is your schedule for getting this done? Consult your writing schedule that you did for today!
Task
I (strongly!) encourage you to address all 8 of the above questions, but, for now, just comment below with responses to 3 of the above 8 questions or instructions.
After commenting below, click the button to continue:
3) I think the addition of hyperlinks, since the Rhetorical Analysis resembles a blog post, can enhance my analysis to allow readers to directly find my sources that I talk about or analyze in my rhetorical analysis. I also want to elaborate on specifics in my rhetorical analysis to explain music and my life, and the correlation between my feelings and emotions at a certain time to the music I listen to.
5) Hyperlinks, and perhaps I can find a way to post some videos or the YouTube videos directly onto the blog post.
8) I think throughout spring break, I will spontaneously edit certain points as I will be listening to the songs mentioned in my Rhetorical Analysis while I am on the road. I would probably not be able to read through the entirety and fully edit until April 5th which would be the first full night I will take concrete time to reread, edit, elaborate, add, and finalize my final draft.
1. I understand that generally, writing is not always going to be this deeply personal activity, but at this age and during these times where our personal flaws become increasingly more evident, if I am going to be investing a lot of time into writing, it might as well be about myself. Writing about myself helps me recognize and concretize my ideas about who I perceive myself to be and hopefully this can work as a mechanism to improve myself.
4. A change I might make to my thesis would be to see how limited my specific examples from my texts will be in my body paragraphs and based on that I might revisit my thesis statement to make sure the examples fit the specific point I am aim to convey.
6. I noticed in my Literacy Narrative that sometimes my sentences are too long which also means that they are often overpacked with ideas for no reason which could make it more difficult to read from the audience’s perspective because it might be difficult to process many ideas at once instead of taking each idea one at a time.
2. My writing is mainly about the characters traits I have learned throughout my life. I will try to write more about myself while doing the analysis, hopefully this can create a relation between the source and me. Through writing about myself, I hope to add what I experienced personally to the writing and hopefully better depict the change that has occurred.
3. I will add additional information to support my claims when I write about the podcast between Joe Rogan and David Goggins. I feel as if this section of writing was rushed and lacking information and analysis. Will attempt to do by this incorporating hyperlink or citing sources.
4. My thesis was not clear in writing. I will try to draw a connection between the two mediums I chose and how they affected my life before when I was young and my life now.
2. I think I would add more life experiences to he essay and realize that its all about me and how I have grown as a person.
3. I will enhance my analysis by maybe interacting with the reader and making them think as I am thinking so they could understand what Im trying to explain.
8. I will get these things done by setting aside some hours of my days to strictly revising and will ask for help if needed along the way.
1. What I love about this piece is that it allows me to think back into my childhood and try and analyze how I grew. I want to work more on improving my body paragraphs by making sure they have enough details and don’t write anything unnecessary. The most exciting part of the text is when I think back on the good times while writing.
3. I will enhance and add analysis to my draft by providing a lot of examples and depth with all my points I make.
8. My schedule for getting this done is trying to work on at least an hour a day throughout the break.
1. What I love about this piece of writing is the memories it has brought back and the connections I am able to make so freely. What I want to return to and work on would be fixing up certain points in some of my paragraphs.
5. Perhaps more visuals, something that can bring the reader closer to the writing.
8. My schedule for getting this done is to take maybe 2 hours of my day to work on my draft
1. My favorite part of this essay was looking back on the experiences I had in my life that changed my outlook on life overall.
4. I added deeper analysis into my essay by explaining further into some things that the audience may not know about, such as the show impractical jokers.
8. I planned to put roughly 3 hours to write my final essay.