Joseph Gohari
Professor Graves
English 2150
Task One: Add research and context to your piece. Use a bibliography (non-annotated) at the end for reference. Make sure you’re incorporating at least six credible (not all peer-reviewed, but just credible) sources in your paper.
Omitted the paragraph “Virality is the tendency of a piece of information, image or a video to be rapidly shared among users of the internet by person to person circulation without the quality being affected Virality . The quality of being viral is, therefore, the bases of virality as a given item or piece of information requires to be popularized by progressive sharing through the internet and especially in social media” because It was repetitive and wording was off. Paragraph still functions without.
Added an example to how negative emotions blend with positive emotions using Kanye.
Explained more on the concert and how drugs played an affect in the concert viewing.
Task Two: Revise your central thesis in the paper to help organize the frame and vision of what material is going to come after. Have a clear opening claim about the qualities of virality.
Revised the thesis to explain what ill be talking about in the essay “since most of media is now being displayed on social platforms like Instagram, Facebook, Twitter, etc… it has become a focal point for business to boost up their viral marketing campaigns and improve on advertisement.”
Expanded more on the double focus point
Task Three: Review my notes and clear up confusing passages—often confusing for their diction and syntax on the level of the sentence.
Changed “found” into “finds”
Fixed proper notation of sources like “funk” and “Southgate”
Fixed the paragraph about emails making it clearer and broader. Added to the conclusion of this paragraph