Joe Gohari
English 2150
Professor Graves
5/16/19
Labor Log for Assignment 1
Task One: Incorporate much more telling detail into your works- Use examples to illustrate clear commentary on each piece
Added more detail into the intro by adding “After seeing how fame was so easily achieved by vloggers on YouTube like Dobrik, Trisha Paytas, Aspyn Parker, and the “Vlog Squad” millennials feel that it does not take much to become like them. Knowing that it does not take much to become viral, only using a camera. The Chainsmokers and David Dobrik both prove how the new millennial age has been based on virality and how one could achieve it through song and videos.”
Switched the third paragraph with the second paragraph to offer a little backround about how selfies came about.
Explained more on the Kanye/TMZ interview
Task Two: Offer a sense of context for each piece that draws the disparate elements of your essay together into a more cohesive discussion.
Provided more context on EDM and the selfie movement
More Context in the intro
Talked about what the chainsmokers were trying to prove with the song “Kanye” adding ““Kanye” speaks about how most people want to “be like Kanye” with the outlandish comments he makes, making him go more viral”
Included more detail on clickbait and the use of thumbnails while also giving some more context on how Trisha Paytas also uses a similar approach.
Omitted the paragraph about SEO’s because it did not fit in with the structure of the essay.
Provided more context on the song selfie and how there music video also became viral.
Task Three: Address a variety of vague or overgeneralizing comments in the text- replacing them with specific and closer analysis
Added “With the use of mini movies vloggers and people can now document there trip over a short film. Usually they will take videos of the fun parts of their trips and when creating a home video will often add a song in the background while the videos transition from one scene to the other” on the subject of vacation