Student Responses

1. After reading Lunsford and Ruszkiewicz and familiarizing myself with Ede’s method, I revised my paper to give more credit to my sources. Although I cited the websites in a bibliography, I hardly gave my articles credit in the words of my paper. I also decided to change some words in my essay to make it less similar to the words of the article, although I am highlighting the same point. I also now understand that quoting a source is for its well-written language or complicated concepts, but also for agreeing or disagreeing with an author. 
2. According to Lunsford and Ruszkiewicz, academic integrity is defined as giving your sources credit when using their information. This will enhance your ethos. If you find yourself stuck on trying to paraphrase something that the author said perfectly, just quote their words to provide the best information and credibility possible for readers. Plagiarism happens if you’re not careful which can create the ethical issue, said by Lunsford and Ruszkiewicz, of claiming another’s work as your own.

1. Something I revised in my paper was the repstive language I used when quoting an author’s text. I often found myself using the word “claims”. After reading Lunsford and Ruszkiewicz, I found a list of signal verbs to use such as replies, expresses, and discusses. I also revised some of the quotes I placed in my writing and replaced them with quotes people will find interesting. This is key to keeping the reader’s attention. Finally, since a huge part of my research based argument comes from summarizing information I learned, I decided to use more of my own words opposed to the author’s to keep my language objective.

 

1. Lunsford and Ruszkiewicz defined academic integrity as both an ethical issue and academic one. When you are writing an argumentative essay, you may find yourself having to give an author’’s opinion. In this instance, it’s best to directly quote the author’s words instead of parag[hraing what they said in order to eliminate any bias you may use when rephrasing their words. When writing a paper, you use outside sources all the time. It’s important to make sure you cite the work you have borrowed to the best of your ability to enhance ethos in your paper. It’s not just an academic issue because stealing someone’s words comes down to how well you can be trusted as a writer. Nobody will want to read or believe your work if you are known for stealing sources and ideas.

1. Something I revised in my paper was when I summarized the central idea of a passage. Not only did I summarize the long passage I also used evidence from the passage to back up my summary. I did this because I felt that summarizing the passage instead of just using a small section of it would be more convenient in my paper. Acknowledging the fact that the article supports my argument I took that to my advantage and shortened it up for the readers to get a sense of understanding, they would also get an idea of where my paper is headed. I also quoted a couple of my sources to back up what I had to say about my argument.
2. According to Lunsford and Ruszkiewicz, academic integrity is giving proper credit to the creators of different types of sources. It is extremely easy to be accused of plagiarizing if a source is not properly cited. Even a small picture that was used on a piece of work could be accused of plagiarism for the simple fact that it was not properly cited like it should have been. Lunsford and Ruszkiewicz feel that proper citation is an ethical issue because the writer who does not give proper citation is technically claiming that as their own work, which is not. That is considered to be an ethical issue.

1. Since the high rise of smartphones, mental distress has increased
2. Self harm has also increased since the breakout of smartphones
3. Smartphones are causing an increase of envy feeling among the youth.
4. Smartphones have also caused an insufficient amount of sleep among the youth.
5. Females have more exposure to cyberbullying than males since they spend more time on social media
6. Social media has caused a huge depressive impact among adolescents
7. Students who tend to stay more on social media have a lower self esteem.
8. Using social media and smartphones in a proper manner.

Outline:

• Introduction:

• Thesis statement 

• Create an Argument 

• Definition Happiness and Money.

• Explain one resource’s report (Like proposal Kit): Boyce, Christopher J, Gordon D.A Brown, and Simon C Moore. “Money and Happiness: Rank of Income, Not Income, Affects Life Satisfaction.” Psychological science 21.4 (2010)

• “Money and Happiness: Rank of Income, Not Income, Affects Life Satisfaction.”

• Try to evaluate money and happiness related to rank, income, and life.

• Provide evidence 

•  Second Resource: Mogilner, Cassie, and Michael I Norton. “Time, Money, and Happiness.” Current opinion in psychology 10 (2016): 

• “Time, Money, and Happiness.” 

• Raise one explain one question related to time and money.

• Is money is more valuable than time?

• Explain how focusing on time makes a person happy.

• Provide evidence 

• Third Resource:DeVoe, Sanford E, and Jeffrey Pfeffer. “When Is Happiness About How Much You Earn? The Effect of Hourly Payment on the Money—Happiness Connection.” Personality & social psychology bulletin 35.12 (2009)

• The counterclaim indirectly demonstrates that happiness depends on money.

• Disagreement with the statement that happiness depends on economic factors.

• Pros and cons Money and Happiness are related to resources, providing pieces of evidence from the resources

• Conclusion: providing two/three more resources to draw a conclusion and provide a different point of view.

 

1. I added a paraphrase and a summary into my paper. I also got rid of footnotes. Put works cited page instead. I also made a mistake of citing the wrong author, so I fixed that too. Fixed my citation to properly reflect that multiple authors have written one of my sources. 
2. Academic integrity is when you properly cite your sources. It’s when you acknowledge when you borrow someone else’s ideas. Not properly citing your sources would be the same as claiming someone’s work as your own. They say that even though the phrase “there’s nothing new under the sun,” and it’s impossible to acknowledge every single thing you’ve been influenced by, you should aim to cite when you directly take someone else’s ideas.

1. Intro to topic, with details about the Mediterranean diet.
2. Describes it’s benefits and what it does for you
3. A study that includes two new variables showing how the diet decreases mortality rate and helps the immune system
4.  Explains how the Western Planned Diet
5. Contrasts the positives from the Mediterranean diet
6. Explains the negatives of the WPD
7. Study is shown how the WPD increases your chances of death and cancer growth
8. Shows the specific foods that go in each diet
9. Elaborates on what exactly makes the WPD so bad for you
10. Encourages people to follow the Mediterranean diet plan to help better their overall health.