Through the workshop that we did in class for our Compare and Contrast paper, I realized that my paper had interconnecting ideas. The reverse outlining we did showed me that I had some form of unity and structure in my essay. However, my peers said that lost some focus by not transitioning and connecting my body paragraphs more effectively. Also, my conclusion was weak. It was the dreaded summarization, and did not bring up a thought or idea that comes from my essay.
I will look improve my transitioning by tying in the topics of one paragraph to next. Hinted at or integrating an idea from my intended next paragraph into my current paragraph should help focus and improve transitioning. As for the conclusion, I will have to do more brain storming or go through our blog/twitter feed for help of an idea that springs from my own.
