In my neighborhood, there is a park right outside my house. This park stretches 2 miles and is full of greenery for the people residing along the park. The park is a place for all of the children to come hangout and play with their friends, or for some people to run along for exercise. This park attracts a lot of different types of people, from young to old all around the community. For some this park is a place to relax and catch a breath of fresh air. There are a plenty amount of trees with many types of wildlife running around such as birds and squirrels. This park brings a feeling of refreshment to an already highly polluted city. The park is also a childhood place for me and my siblings where we used to go play together.
I added a sentence explaining the types of people in the park. I also added another sentence explaining the different wildlife in the park. The reason I added these two sentences is because I was inspired by the reading to add more detail because it is what makes an analysis better.
Thanks for this, Ibrahim! One thing I wondered as I read this is, what made this park so inviting to you as a kid, and how has that changed over time? How is it different (more appealing?) from other parks in your neighborhood or in the city? How did the designer’s choices change the way people experience the park?