Rousseau’s theory of education by man, nature and things is reflected in Mary Shelley’s Frankenstein through the beast Frankenstein creates, but the strongest influence of beast’s development is education by man because it is evident throughout the novel the beast was most affected by his treatment by man.
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Ok, here’s what’s good. I know which theory text and what literary text you’re using. AND (really exciting), you do stake some sort of claim. You say that education by man is more powerful in the novel than any of the other educations.
I have two concerns. One you haven’t gone far enough to articulate your so what. While I can imagine in your thesis that a so what might be that Shelley’s novel casts doubt on Rousseau’s belief in the infallibility of an education by nature and his belief that we should focus on an education of things. HOWEVER, I am still imagining that so what right now. Once you make your observation and then stake a claim, you have to tell me how what you’re saying matters to how we read Shelley or Rousseau or both.
My second concern is related. I think your language is going to make it hard for you to do the above. You have two instances of passive voice. “is reflected in” and “was most affected by.” And you make the vague support that something “is evident.” Nothing is evident; if it were, why would you need to tell me. How could it be an argument?
Also when you say, “but the strongest,” I don’t really know why you’re using “but.” What are you negating exactly?
I think you’re going need to flush out your thoughts more and use more active sentence constructions.