An education should be personalized and should be unique for everyone. Usually one method is used for everyone and that is school. This method then becomes universalized and a standard. However, not many understand that an education is not only found in school, but can also be received outside a school environment. With that idea in mind, it bring us to Malcolm X’s point that an education is different for everyone. An education is tailored to your own personal needs desires, capacity, and speed. Not everyone is the exact same, differentiating an education from individual to individual and each have different motivations to learn. To understand this, we will first look at Malcolm X’s life and the thing she did in his “educational” path. We will see certain things he had to do so that he could learn. After that, we will then look at Victor and Frankenstein from the novel “Frankenstein.” We will see how their own situations and experiences impacted their own method of learning and receiving an education. Which would in turn emphasize Malcolm X’s point.
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What’s good:
Your hook is clear.
You have a transition.
Your roadmap following your thesis is clear.
Concerns
You are working your transitions, but it does feel a bit forced how you actually introduce Malcolm X. (I.e. “With that in mind, it brings us to…”)
So I think you picked the kind of thesis that I said works better for your education philosophy than for your paper. For this assignment you needed to use one theory text and one literary text. You however have two literary texts. To a degree this could have worked if you had regarded one as a kind of theory text. Ultimately in this paper, your “it” should be some specific part of the literary or theory text. Your thesis should basically be how the other text ( the one that doesn’t contain your “it”) helps us to read some part of your “it” text differently or more deeply.
Your argument is essentially outside of the text: “Not everyone is the exact same, differentiating an education from individual to individual and each have different motivations to learn.” Your it here is education and more specifically education as it differs from person to person. That’s too broad.
Right now your texts are examples for an ideal outside of them. I need you to formulate a thesis that’s about the conversation between these two texts, a thesis where the stakes are really about how we understand one or both of these texts.