School should not be the basis of education. Formal schooling is not the only way to become educated, to obtain skills, and to achieve goals. A person has the freedom and ability to learn at their own pace and own environment. Schooling feeds a bunch of uncessary information in a person’s mind and they don’t have the ability to learn what they want and find certain truths and answers. It is essential at times that a person can educate him or herself to find the answers they want, or pursue their dreams. In The Secrets of a Buccaneer Scholar, James Marcus Bach explains that school isn’t needed to educate a person. Bach emphasized the point that self-education allows a person to learn in their own comfort and put their knowledge to use in things that they like. Malcolm X’s persistence and dedication in educating himself while being in prison reflects Bach’s idea that self-education can go a long way. With self education, Malcolm X was able to find truths about black history, and became a powerful human rights activist.
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What’s good:
Your hook is a clear bold statement. (I wonder though if you mean that School should not be the only or even the primary education).
You identify a theory text and a literary text.
Concerns:
The bold hook is fine. It’s better because of the clarity and brevity of the sentence, for the sound more than anything else. Your elaboration on it or your transition though starts to feel like you’re making claims with no foundation (i.e. “Schooling feeds a bunch of uncessary information in a person’s mind”).
Your thesis is too broad. First while I see the connection, you don’t need Bach to say what you do about Malcolm X. Secondly what you say about Malcolm X is both limiting and too general. You say that his self education “goes a long way.” What does that mean? How could you prove that based on a reading of that one essay? I think you need to go into the text. You need to see what it is actually saying about the self and education.
Format the titles of books and novels correctly (you can do it in a post even if I can’t in a comment).