Knowledge is power. Knowledge can elevate one. Knowledge can alter one’s opinion. Knowledge can cultivate one’s inner potential. Knowledge hinders one to continue growing as a person. Knowledge creates experiences that broadens one’s horizon. Knowledge can be found through other sources rather than the typical school system. For centuries, many believed that the only foundation for education was schooling nevertheless, as more people shunned away from the system, they realized that knowledge can be found through anything, even experiences. Schooling isn’t always necessary merely because students gain knowledge by doing and experiencing rather than just listening in a classroom setting. In Mary Shelly’s Frankenstein, his experiences pushed him to educate himself about humans which lead to the monster learning how to read and write on his own without schooling. Malcolm X exemplifies that knowledge can expand the way of thinking. He did not go to school however, with determination and hard work he became a very powerful leader. This notion creates a feel that education can be self taught and knowledge can be found through anything.
What’s good
*You identify specific texts.
*You have a specific theme you’re interested in: self education.
*I see you making the move to say that if we look at these texts through Bach then we can see this thing in these two texts.
My concerns:
Your introduction part is way too broad. You spend most of the time making big statements about knowledge. I think you need to figure out where your focus is and have an introduction that starts there.
I think your thesis though is also broad,
*You should have only one literary text; not two.
*I don’t see how you need Bach to read the self education in these texts? If you’re using the Bach, what he says about self-education has to illuminate something in particular about the way these texts depict self education.
*Even without the Bach, what you have right now doesn’t seem to be an argument. Essentially you are saying that the texts of Malcolm X and Frankenstein have examples of self education. I don’t know that anyone would argue that point and you do not give us any so what or comment about what’s at stake in their portrayals of self-education.