Category: Blog 9

In my instance, I selected #4 since it was more successful. I believe I’ve completely mastered my topic when I can talk to someone about my thoughts or my paper without having to look at it. I was able to talk with my partner about my topic, describing why I picked the artist and the important themes I wanted to include in my main body paragraphs. I was also able to fully explain everything to him, making it much easier for him to comprehend. It also made me more enthusiastic about my subject since I could see their reactions to what I was saying, and I felt I was on to something and wanted to share it.

The strategy that I chose was number 5, “to restructure your essay and discover new ideas in the process.” and strategy no. 1: “To Say Something Better.” I really struggle to dive in and dig deep to give analysis and context. I feel like expanding more will greatly benefit my writing and paper. Also I find that I tend to be repetitive with my analysis and claim and do not really introduce new ideas. I am trying to focus on that and the overall organization of my paper. Having everything organized and structured so it can flow nicely and be fluid. I just need to work on analysis in which I can explain the evidence and quotes that I use and how it both benefits and supports or proves the claims made in the paper. Isolating a single topic and attempting to develop it as far as possible could be a useful method for me to clear my mind and understand how the idea will fit into the larger essay. Strategy number 1 allowed me to go deeper into a topic and provide more examples. I was able to strengthen my point by building on it further. I believe I chose strategy number 1 because it made it much easier for me to organize and clarify my thoughts.

The exercise I chose to do was number 4. Doing this exercise allowed me to realize all the different types of ideas I had for my paper even though I have not yet wrote them all down. I chose to do this exercise because I know that its always easier for me to say out loud my ideas instead of keeping them inside and having to write them down later or sometimes when I choose to write down things I always forget what was my idea, so, it made it easier for me to say it out loud and my partner write it down at the same time. At the time I know that my biggest struggle was coming up with the theme or the overall main question which includes what was it that I was arguing. While completing this exercise I was also coming to the result that my argument was going to be how is the Women’s movement today and why is it still being fought for.

The exercise I chose to do was exercise #3. I started off by reading the comments my partner made and tried my best to revise my essay so that it can clarify some of the concerns my peer had as they were reading my essay. Having these comments really helped me realize what I could change in my essay and how I can organize my essay moving forward, especially since that was something I was struggling with. Having done this exercise I was able to gather my ideas as to what I can add to my essay and also try to keep in mind the question, “How would my essay sound from a reader’s perspective?”. By keeping this in mind, I will be able to make changes to my essay as I go back and revise it again, just as I did with this exercise.

The strategy I decided to choose was option 1. Option 1 made it way easier for me to expand on a topic and to give more examples. I was able to further build on my argument and make it sound stronger. I think I chose option 1 because it made it way easier for me to clear my ideas and organize them a bit better. I think the main thing that I struggled with was repetition. Not with just sentences but mainly words. Being able to look at a specific sentence and build on it made it so much easier to add to the paper. I used less repetition.

The strategy that I chose was number 5, “to restructure your essay and discover new ideas in the process”. When I first wrote my essay I felt overwhelmed, I couldn’t seem to get a good handle on the structure of my essay and the content wasn’t ordered neatly and clearly, so I re-listed them and chose to order what I thought was more important to write about so that I could understand what I was saying and so that the reader could understand what I was saying. I also needed to make the sources I chose relate in some way to the work I chose, to make them easier to understand and to uncover more things to think about. Now that I have a general direction on how to connect these sources and works, I just need to focus on the sources I need to use.

I chose strategy #5, “Reorganize your essay and discover new ideas in the process” to help me revise my draft. The main problem I had with the draft was that it was difficult to work around the thesis statement ideas from different perspectives. Since this exercise helped me in the process of sequencing my paragraphs, I could see if my logic was clear and if I was making the same points over and over again. I could also clearly find out if my main idea was being explored in more depth around my thesis statement. My thoughts became clear and organized with the help of this stratagem, and I think I can write more about the connection between materialism in the book and life.

I chose to use strategy number 3 because I think no matter how many times I reread my own paper I wouldn’t find an issue with it unless it was pointed out by someone else. After receiving my feedback from my partner, I read through my paper once again to see if  I noticed the concerns that my partner bought up such as adding more quotes and connecting it back to the film. I kept this in mind while I was editing and writing my new draft, which was really helpful and I also found some new sources connect back.

The strategy I chose for revision is option 1 because I think I can expand and explain further on some parts of the essay. The exercise helped me explore some possible ideas I can still incorporate in one of my body paragraphs. The body paragraph I was working on contained some quotations about how the show Money Heist inspired real life protests. I think I can write more about how the issues people were protesting about are similar to the issues caused by neoliberalism. I can also connect back to the issue of economic inequality and perhaps include ideas about the lack of representation of minorities. The main thing I am struggling with right now is trying to connect the art I’m working out to real life events.