Category: Blog 4

In my situation, sentence analysis assisted me in carefully selecting what I was attempting to express or how I wanted it to sound to my reader. My word choice, in particular, to make my sentences more effective when someone reads my work. When I’m writing, I’ve always thought that I write too much and that it doesn’t always make sense or fit together. When I was doing sentence analysis, I took my time to break down exactly what I was attempting to say and how I should say it to have the greatest impression.Furthermore, when I cite a statement from an article, I frequently just throw the quotation in without explaining it or properly weaving it into the sentence. By correctly evaluating the quote and really inserting it in the appropriate position, I learned to sort of fit everything neatly into the paragraph. Adding more complicated phrases to my writing would help me expand on what I had written in my draft and present my ideas more fluidly on paper. Adding more complicated phrases would also allow me to integrate some of the basic sentences I was using, thus boosting the flow and general clarity of my work. These improvements may enable me to reach a higher level of enhanced writing, which I may apply to my other classes. I also realized that, while my work makes sense to me, I want others to read and comprehend all I wrote. I want my paper’s message to be obvious and to influence readers as they read it or to allow them to reflect on what they’ve just read.

After completing my sentence analysis, I noticed that I used a mix of simple and complex sentences; but to be very honest I was having trouble identifying what type of sentences they were since I have never learned this technique before.  I was not really surprised with my results because of the way I write out my drafts. when I write my drafts I tend to organize it by ideas. and evidence. this later helps me because all I have to do is explain and give even more details so I can build off of what I had. The changes I can make with my sentences are to make even more complex and complex compound instead of simple sentences. Changing my sentences will allow my writing to sound more descriptive, smooth and sophisticated. Another reason why I feel like my writing came out with these type of sentences was because I wasn’t so sure how to properly add my own voice into the writing mostly because I shared a lot of evidence and quotes. The way I write my papers is starting with my draft including the main points/ information then evidence. Writing it like this has made it seem as if I don’t know how to explain my evidence enough. After this I like to work off of my teachers or peers feedback because it allows me to fix any mistakes and get more ideas on how to expand my work. Overall, analyzing my sentences has helped me to realize how I should explain my thoughts in a better format. I hope for my essay to change from sounding too weak to more stronger and I definitely plan on using this technique with my future writing.

     The sentence analysis I had to do for this blog was really helpful for me to find the changes I want to make to my first draft. I was a little surprised with the result of my sentence analysis. After reading the two paragraphs I selected, I found that I have a lot of lengthy sentences, with them being complex, compound, and complex-compound sentences. I do have a few simple sentences as well, but by looking at my writing, I see that I try to fit a lot of ideas together that are similar thematically. Although I don’t have a problem with that, I think adding in simple, short sentences to amplify some ideas would be helpful for my final paper. By doing this, my writing can become clearer, and I would be able to put emphasis on my claims without my ideas being too lengthy that they are too difficult to follow through. For example, after I present a quote from one of the articles I am using, I can add a simple sentence emphasizing the main idea, or the important point I’m trying to make by placing that quote there. I think this would help my paper overall by making it more organized, and giving my writing a better flow. This also relates to the changes I’m making with my paper since I want my writing to be organized better, making clear claims that I want to get across to the reader. In addition, I found that I often repeat the same words in my paper, and after looking closely into my writing, I realize that I should use better organization, and different vocabulary to make my claims reach to the audience better. 

When it comes to the result of my sentence analysis, I was not surprised by the results. Many of the sentences within the two paragraphs consisted of complex sentences with some complex-compound sentences and a few simple sentences. I was not surprised by that because I was very descriptive and I connected the two texts well which needed me to use complex sentences more than the other types of sentences. I had some complex-compound sentences so that I can connect multiple ideas at once so that I could emphasize certain points that I had made and make it an overall more descriptive paper. I used some simple sentences so that I could make clear points and making it a much clearer paper . It reveals about my writing style that I like to analyze and describe the points that I make in the paper in detail so I tend to use more complex sentences than the other types. The changes that the count of sentence types within my paper will prompt me to include some slightly shorter sentences so that the paper can be slightly more smooth. It can enhance my writing by making the paper slightly more smooth and it would make my points a little more clear and possibly impactful. The sentence style within my paper correlates to my edits and revisions that I plan on making in my draft because it might incline me to use different vocabulary that can make my sentences more descriptive for the paper.

When I was reading my two paragraphs and doing sentence analysis, I noticed that I used mostly compound and complex sentences in my writing. I think these types of sentences are an expression of my writing style because I have a lot of ideas that I want to express. I am not surprised by this result because compound and complex sentences make my ideas more focused. I realized that the complex sentences were difficult for the reader to read. There are too many things trying to be expressed, and the sentences don’t link smoothly enough, which makes it confusing to read. The result brought me the insight that I should not repeat too many similar topics and sentences, which would make the content feel one-dimensional. To accommodate these problems, I will highlight the sentences in which I want to express my ideas and cut out some repetitive words to make my writing look more concise and clear. I will also make a list of the keywords I want to express first, and then connect the keywords into sentences. I believe that sentence style affects the overall style of an essay. Combining different sentence styles can make my essay express ideas more vividly and imaginatively. Sentence structure correlated with other edits and revisions I planned to make, with the themes and sentences of each paragraph producing correspondence. Sentence structure plays a key role in the flow of the essay. The correct use of sentence structure will make my essay more attractive and persuasive, as well as express a clearer theme.

After completing my sentence analysis, I noticed that I tend to use more compound sentences, throughout the two paragraphs that I chose from my essay, compared to simple sentences and complex sentences. I’m not surprised by my results as I am aware that I tend to be very wordy when it comes to my writing. I noticed that the couple of simple sentences that I used were to enhance my writing by making a statement or asking a question to grab the attention of my audience. I believe that in order to make my writing better, in this case, my comparative analysis essay, I should try to use more of the other sentence types. This might help my essay look and sound more even. I could possibly use more complex sentences when I analyze a quote. This will allow me to go more in-depth into what the quote is trying to show and how it connects to the overall message I intend to write about. In addition to that I realized that while I was writing my draft, I didn’t really focus on brainstorming all of my ideas and evidence onto a separate sheet of paper. Instead, I allowed my thoughts to keep running while I was working on my essay, which may have been the reason why certain sections sound repetitive or wordy. I noticed that I mainly struggle with that but for this essay, I can try to first process my ideas and then add them to my paper later on.

After choosing my two paragraphs and completing my sentence analysis, I noticed that I mostly used compound and simple sentences. However, these results did not seem to surprise me. Usually, I use simple sentences, so the reader doesn’t get confused reading my writings. While making this analysis, I also noticed that it sounded like I was writing using multiple tones. This deep analysis of my draft made me think about how I can introduce different sentence structures to improve the quality of my writing overall. I can use complex sentences to improve clarity in my writing.
Additionally, complex sentences can make my writing concise for the reader. I believe making my writing straightforward can allow me to add additional ideas. These new changes in my writing would also allow me to improve how I write overall in all my classes, making my sentences sound smooth and sophisticated. Adding more complex sentences in my writing would also build on whatever I had written in my draft and display my thoughts smoothly on the paper. Adding more complex sentences would also allow me to combine some of the simple sentences I used, drastically improving the flow in my writing and improving the clarity overall. These revisions can take me onto another level of improved writing that I can take advantage of in my other courses. I must also overlook how many times I repeated the same sentence structures since using too many simple sentences can make my writing sound weak, and using too many complex sentences can complicate my writing for the reader.

 

While reading my selected paragraphs and doing my sentence analysis, I noticed a mix of simple and complex sentences.  I like to use commas in my writing and since it is an analytical essay, explaining your thought process is necessary.  This wasn’t a big surprise to me because I tend to use a lot of simple sentences to explain the complex sentences further. In a way I think I don’t explain my quotes enough and that I need to do that more. What I understood by my sentence analysis is that I need to mix up my sentence structure more often. Also because it was a draft, I just wanted to get all of my ideas on paper and see where I can expand from there. Today’s class also helped because I realized I can also connect the timelines. It would help my essay flow smoothly and would be helpful input to my reader. I can also work on my grammar and the vocabulary I use to connect my sentences. That would turn simple sentences into compound complex sentences. I noticed 2-3 complex-compound sentences but I should use more to explain my thoughts. There was a lot to work with in both articles included in my essay. I felt like Dickson was very thorough in her essay and explained very well what she meant. It hard to rephrase those quotes because she did explain it perfectly and it flows very well with my essay also causing me to use a lot of simple sentences. 

The results were not too surprising to find out after identifying sentence types. I noticed that I mainly used compound or compound-complex sentences in my writing. It was interesting to analyze how I write while writing a paper, and I have determined that I write in three different ways. I either write as if I am speaking, write as if I am summarizing (not analyzing), or I write as if I am telling a story. You can tell through the different sentence structures or through the overall tone of the paragraph. I also noticed that I insert a lot of commas, whether I need them or not. This goes into play whenever I write as if I am speaking to an audience. I am planning on changing the way my tone is conveyed in my writing through the sentence structures and tone of the paper. This will be vital when I am comparing the artifacts I chose to Dickinson’s graffiti article because it will allow my writing to sound more analytical. I always had trouble with that in high school because I could not retain the information that the teacher was explaining. Sentence style definitely correlates to the future edits I will be making to my draft because it will help the paper sound more cohesive than it is now. Upon reading my piece, I noticed that it lacks flow since my ideas are all over the place. Sentence style can really help me to create sentences that fit into the analysis portion and sound like my thoughts are together.

After checking the first and second paragraphs of my draft, I found many sentences with commas, including one simple sentence, three complex sentences, and nine compound sentences. the structure of the sentences is very important and largely determines the reader’s experience. Using overly simple sentences may make the essay look poorly written, but using too many complex sentences can lead to confusion for the reader, so it is best to use both simple and complex sentences in your essay to make it neat and organized and easy to understand. I was a little surprised by the sentences I used, because I used a lot of complex sentences, even though it might make my essay complicated. I usually think of a general framework and start writing, because I don’t really like to delete everything and start over, which is very inefficient. Even though it’s just a draft, I still write it as if it were a formal article. When I go back and check it, if there are no huge mistakes, then I don’t have to spend a lot of time revising for that. Maybe I’ll choose to add some simple sentences so that my subsequent articles will allow the reader to better understand what I’m saying. I think revising sentence patterns is an exercise for my own writing, which can enhance my writing skills. But I will most likely keep my own style, which is something different for everyone. I also think I need to shorten some of these sentences to make them more impactful.