For this revision experiment, I decided to do it with my older brother. I explained to him that my paper was about how black struggle has been represented in music in the last couple of years, and then I summarized my essay and had him take notes. I believe that my verbal summary pretty much matched my paper, mainly because I have read my paper so much so I knew what I wrote down. One thing that I realized that I can work on is when my brother asked me about how all these artists can relate to each other. I feel like I can write a whole paragraph on that and how they all intend to spread the same message at the end of the day.
Spring 2022
