Frankenstein by Mary Shelley demonstrates why man must not interfere with the role that nature has in creating life. Jean-Jacque Rousseau writes in “Emile: or A Treatise on Education” that nature is one of our three masters of education; it gives us life and it is what helps us grow physically from newborns to adults. If we decide to interfere with the education of nature, we run the risk of a creating a being that may not be what we hoped for. Our creation could eventually lead to our downfall.
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What’s good:
I know which text you’re using, and you make a claim.
Concerns:
Only the first sentence is working for a thesis statement right now. The other two sentences seem to start talking about Rousseau before I really understand the fullness of your argument.
2) Your thesis has a claim, but it has no indication of how you’re going to make that claim. What is it that the text does that gives us the Roussean nightmare of a life totally outside of the education of nature?
3) You need a so what. I think you’re kind of riding on a “it shows us” so-what, but that’s really not very strong, Unless you are you trying to make the huge claim that Rousseau didn’t show us the importance of his own thoughts and he needed writers like Shelley to make his points clear, just saying it “shows us,” is to vague a so what. You need to tell me how your identification of this Rousseauean principle in the text affects your reading of Shelley or Rousseau or both.
4) Lastly Robert, I know you know how to format the title of a book. We went over this last semester. Look it up. Correct it.