After analyzing my rough draft I found that there were a lot of corrections I can definitely make. It all stems from how I structure my sentences in regards to what I’m talking about. An issue a notice a lot is that I try to cram a lot of ideas into one sentence. I do this by the overuse of commas or transitional phrases. It is good to use these to convey a certain message, but the overuse of them is not ideal for the reader as well as the writer. In the sentence analysis, I was able to find choppy sentences and also nominalizations. For example, ” This included lowering the expenses the local government used as well as pushing the poor and working-class out of the city”, this can also be considered a nominalization. I used too many ”and” when I could have simply simplified this sentence better. After carefully editing, the sentence would be ”The local government planned to lower expenses by pushing the lower class out of the city.” These changes make my writing look more professional as I am able to ground my ideas.