Initially looking at my paper I noticed that my sentences were simplistic at first but then as the themes in the paper expand so does my form f writing. It becomes more complex and compound sentence. One main example of this was midway in my main paragraph where i compared two separate ideas and my from of writing reflects that. I use a comma right after an independent clause. I also used the worth “yet” often to show disparities between my analyzing of two topics. Now with my next revision ill make sure to enhance this but not overbear. I still feel that simple sentences still need their purpose and are there for a reason. While I want to add a more sophisticated look by using better sentence structure, I Still want my voice to be the main viewpoint of the essay so keeping that will be new.
Spring 2022
