Blog 4

My sentences in my draft did not really surprise me at all because I know what type of writer I am and my writing style. I noticed that I had a mix of compound sentences and simple sentences. It is integrated into my paragraphs, there is not really a certain area that I see happen more often. My writing style is very rigid in the beginning because it makes me feel like I have an idea of what I am going to write and as I write, it becomes more freestyle and not as organized. I realize that I have complex sentences here and there in my writing and as I revise, I am able to pick them out and adjust them to use as possible topic sentences and intro to paragraphs because they are very strong sentences. I want to change my simple sentences and where I include them because it will better my writing in the sense that my thoughts are more complete and not all over the place. I want to make sure my sentences lean more towards complex and compound sentences with a mix of simple sentences. Overall, I want to turn my simple sentences into more organized and detailed sentences which help my essay set a much better tone. Word choice and tone mean alot in my essay because I am trying to set a voice for the Chinatown community not only for gentrification but the goal is to educate and bring awareness so that other people want to know more and find ways to support.