Blog 9

While revising my work, I decided to use the revision process of addressing my reader’s concerns. In this process, the reader was to proofread my writing, analyze it thoroughly, and give me critical feedback.  The feedback they gave was very insightful and helped me understand a few things about my paper. I chose this process because I felt as if I would receive more and better feedback for my paper. The other two forms of revision are not things that I regularly struggle with so I chose the third. The reader’s concerns were in the realm of the distribution of the topics in my paper. They advised that I should focus on making a connection between the art piece and the real world. While writing I focused a lot on the art piece and the effects that it had.  However, in doing so, I failed to create an equal dichotomy between it and the real world. Someone who was unfamiliar with the art piece would have a hard time understanding some parts of the paper because there was a lack of comparison where need be. To solve this, I plan on expanding more on the areas of connection where the connection is needed to be made. If I am able to do that it would leave a greater impact on the reader and how they interpret the piece and my writing. Aside from this issue, I am not having many problems with my writing and I am noticing progress.