When revising my first draft it was very important that I understood how my peer reviewers felt the paper read. I wanted to make sure it was cohesive and that the specifics of the cultures I was describing could be understood from someone not a part of those cultures. With that being said I received some excellent critiques from my peer reviewers. Specifically pertaining to where I needed more detail and where I needed some reorganizing for the purpose of clarity. In the second paragraph where I break down my parents’ identities which help to provide contextualization for my background, I got some feedback that it read a bit choppy and could be more cohesive. So I rearranged how I wrote about my parents’ race, ancestry, and nationalities. This definitely helped to make the background of the essay more comprehensible which is necessary towards the understanding of the full essay. Additionally, I was also given critiques about where more detail was needed. One such place was in one of the paragraphs regarding Ashkenazi Jewish Vernacular. I went back and added some specifics which really added to the understanding of the details and how these experiences made me feel. Lastly, I went through and fixed grammatical and spelling errors. This is obviously important to the overall essay and was important to rectify.
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I liked your writer’s letter. Details and organization are very important when it comes to writing an essay so it’s good you were able to fix and add some things to make your writing better.
I’m really curious to read your Literacy Narrative because it sounds so flavorful and intriguing from your Writer’s Letter, Raina!! I think it is very important to traverse the curse of knowledge term Professor Muhlbauer introduced today and add specific information with as much detailed information as possible in order for us readers to get to know the discourse community you acquired literacy in.
It was such a pleasure being able to read your essay and I’m happy that you were able to utilize my, and the rest of our groups, feedback in your revision process! Your essay is very strong but I’m sure the additional revising allowed it to become even more so!
I find it interesting that you were able to understand easily on what you needed to do to improve on your essay. It’s always good to know on what is required to improve off of a draft, be it little errors like grammar or spelling. I do like how you specifically mention a single paragraph that needs revising, which shows that you know what needs to be done and you focus on a specific point rather than the whole paper.