After my fellow peers revised my first draft, it had come to my knowledge that I had an abundance of grammatical mistakes. Last Wednesday, When my group and I were to read each other works, I noticed that my classmates found a common issue in my writing. I had many words that needed capitalization or needed a comma before it among other subtle mistakes you won’t notice on your paper unless you review many times. After seeing this, I took it into account and re-read my paper over and over, looking for grammatical errors that were hard to pinpoint. When it was time to revise our second drafts unfortunately my group couldn’t check over my work because they had to work on their Narratives, so I took this as an opportunity to book a meeting with Professor Muhlbauer. From this, I was able to fix other flaws in my writing. To make my sentences flow like a “waterfall”, my professor told me to reconstruct some of my sentences in a way that it would flow. Professor Muhlbauer also told me to go more in-depth about one of my points, how rocket league served as a “vehicle” for building meaningful conversations with friends. I plan on talking about how It was once through rocket league my friends, Roy and Chris, and I were talking about what we would do with our lives after graduating from high school. Besides these issues listed above, I have not touched my Literacy Narrative for any other manner. I believe this was a strong first attempt at a Literacy Narrative and I should use this well-deserved criticism to develop even better Literacy Narratives and better my writing.