Dear Peer Review Group,

I would like to thank you guys for reading my drafts and helping me along the process of writing, with your helpful advice, sandwiched in between fun conversations during breaks. It was also nice to also get to know you in terms academically, and getting to see your own writing processes. The three of you helped me see from a second, third, and fourth perspective, in which I couldn’t see, in a non-biased way towards my paper. Also, for Professor Graves, who helped identify revision tasks, where were my paper’s weak points. My paper tended to lack the big idea, where there were plenty of details scattered about, but didn’t come together into a whole. Also, I tended to focus less on concluding the end of a draft, so pointing out areas where I should go more into depth, or make a less abrupt transition, was helpful as well. In my writing process, I would like to continue working on improving focus on the bigger picture, or at least the revision task that was given to me in both draft responses: exigency.

What I’ve learned about my paper, is related to the help Wenny, Mizan, and Angel have all helped me with: multiple perspectives. My paper started out analyzing how viewers, of the cultural artifact I’ve chose, affected them, as its audience. It focused on both analysis of selection of tools within the video, and the video editing process. It shifted to adding on my perspective as someone from the audience, in the second draft. In the third draft, the research portion of my paper, I incorporated an economics perspective, revisiting the cultural artifact as a free resource, and adding art markets into my topic. Here, I learned both the pros and cons of how the web affected the arts industry, which is probably not what most people think deeply about, given the heavy usage the Internet comes in play with our daily lives. My final plans are to expand on my previous paragraphs on which I have not done so yet, specifically the third section. I’ll also need to add more onto the area transitioning from the second to third draft, as it seems to be two similar, but still separate, topics. I’ve learned from my writing process, that as there may be a lot of ideas to address, and to divulge about, I kept it safe by starting out with adding numerous details. However, although I started out with analysis of a subject, before going into a bigger idea, I’m not sure if that’s the way it works for me. I’ve worked on a topic doing the opposite way as well, mentioned the main idea before providing detailed explanations.

My academic intentions moving forward are to hopefully remember the rhetorics learned in this class, as so to struggle less in any subjects in the future. Also, it was made well-known to me that presenting was a skill mandatory in college, back in high school. During the week of presentations, it went better than I expected for me, as I wasn’t as nervous compared to previous presentations a few years back. At the moment, I don’t dread the semester I have to take the communications class, as much anymore. Everyone in our class was placed in the same position, of presenting a short slideshow of their semester-long work. Especially to the three of my peer members, I hope for your continued success here at Baruch or wherever you may be, both academically and in happiness.

Sincerely,

Michelle